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| JustAnAmateur 2008-03-03 ch 2,  | abuseIt's quite pleasant,it soothes mt passing time and the best part is it didn't end like a typical love story,that's so a bonus. Overall,as an X-Play host(in my dreams),I'll give you a 4.3 out of 5. |
| JustAnAmateur 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abuseHm,not bad,not bad all,quite good actually. So,there's only two chapters...well,I deal with it. |
| Tierry Leoine 2008-01-08 ch 1, | abuseYou could try editing this, so it would be easier to read. (too much in one paragraph). Othwerwise, i liked it :) |
| DoubleWind 2008-01-05 ch 2, | abuseomg you updated another chapter!! :)~ oh omg no I loved this chapter too!! Actually...I might've actually enjoyed this chapter even more than the first! ::nods head:: I love how you wrote all the emotions and the details--Perhaps maybe because this one had more of a plot to it...? Not sure(i still like oneshots with no real plot tho so :P) either way but, I loved it and actually even though you say it was hard to do Vaan's POV, I thought you did great job ::nods:: I hope you do continue with more stories/chapters like these! really...I love Balthier/Vaan stories and there are fewer out there than I think there should be-but I loved reading your chapters! great job! I hope you keep up the good writing! |
| DoubleWind 2007-11-30 ch 1, | abuseOh no I didnt find it boring at all!! ::nods head:: ^^ I thought you did an awesome job, I really enjoyed it ^_^ omg now you've got me thinking of them in the rain like that >< lol why did you have to remind me that Balthier wears a white shirt?? lol ^^ but really--nice story I liked it a lot ^_^ it was so sweet! |
| sumatri 2007-11-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseits very promising except you could separate the paragraphs where one person speaks. It's easier and professional that way. I hope this helps you. |