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| low-fi boy 2008-05-12 ch 1,  | abuseI am really enjoying this. it seems you havent updated in a while though :( this story has tons of potential, even if its for a couple of fans i recommend continuing. anyway, like i said excellent job. im looking forward to seeing this finished:) |
| Lemurian-hot-chick 2007-12-21 ch 1, | abuseFelix=hard to kill? Anyway, kawaii and creepy at the same time. Definately gives those dang windshippers a run for their money.xD Long live Lighthouseshipping! Update please, I'm impatient! |
| Leoshi 2007-12-19 ch 3, | abuseThis is all pretty good so far. Given, there are a few mistakes ((the ones I noticed are "double-typing", where a word or series of words is repeated, back-to-back)), but it doesn't distract from the reading experience as a whole. Good luck with your writing, and I hope you can contniue! |
| zero 2007-12-07 ch 1, anon. | abuseYour stories were well writen it reely seemed like you knew what you were talking about. the way you put every thing together and had the characters diologues interact with each other was very effective and seemed to just click they pretty much sounded like the next game to the series it was all around extremely entertaining. Your use of imagery really got me into the sory and gave insight into what the characters were thinking and feeling in those moments. Your wording was well thought out and diverse. the stories also seemed to give the original story more depth and a more mature feeling to it. Plus it wasnt all cuties and nice like the original stories from the games it was acualy kinda dark wich was a different side to the story that i reelly liked reading about. The only thing that might through off a reader is some slight spelling errors that made you stop for a sec and figure it out but as you can tell i dont have much room to talk. But all together it was incredibly well constructed and im looking forward to future stories from Riais from the zero |
| GoldenTalesGeek 2007-12-05 ch 3, | abuseNow this is what I'm talking about! Good job! I won't mind the dark elements -pardon the pun- of this story, so long as you do something like this every now and again. I look forward to more! Good luck! ~ GoldenTalesGeek P.S. I sincerely hope I won't be the only one reading this... |
| GoldenTalesGeek 2007-12-02 ch 2, | abuseI'll be frank with you. This fic has a bit darker tone then what I'm used to from a Golden Sun fic. But, so far it's really pretty interesting. I did like this part in chapter one about Mia: "she was caring and nice, and gave her patients ice cream". As long as we have moments of levity like that, or just a moments in the story where things can lighten up somewhat, I think you've got a great story. Don't take the story too seriously, or I may check out. Oh, and one more thing: Make your chapters a little longer. I look forward to the next chapter! Good luck! ~ GoldenTalesGeek |