Hmm, I think I know why this hasn't been reviewed yet. The emotional picture you've painted is soft and bittersweet, but it doesn't have much impact since the girl is non-canon and the identity of the guy is vague. (I'm assuming it's Xemnas since he's the only one who is even remotely dark-skinned, but that's only in the official picture thing. In the game, he's still pretty fair-skinned.) My only suggestion is to make it more obvious who the guy is and keep everything else the same. It's a very pretty drabble; it just needs to be grounded onto something.

-- Karai