You did such a remarkable job with the dialogue -- it was great to read.

You also made Balthier very clever with his little plot - also amazing.

And this is the only threesome that seems actually tasteful. XD

Nice work.

I don't usually read slash, as it's just not my particular cup of tea, but if this doesn't persuade me to I very much doubt anything will. I especially enjoy the light shed on Balthier's character: The times are few and far between when I can feel as if a fic has helped me discover something new about him, or perceive him in a new way.

Very well done, and best of luck with your novel!
M'gana