Good start. A few details...Trabia is 'up' in relation to Balamb, and Squall's eyes are blue, not hazel. Interesting portrayal of Squall and Rinoa's relationship post-game. (And I just realized I clicked the 'Story Alert' button even though this is a completed fic. Oh well.)

Wow, that's an intense opening. Hooked me!

Nice story, can't wait for more ^^