"Ordinary school girl

Cannot finish this haiku

Much too ordinary"

Priceless!

You can always take more grammatical liberties with a haiku than with, say, a sonnet- but that doesn't mean you can always get away with just writing three random-sounding separate sentences that just happen to add up to the 5-7-5 when put together.

Haiku are about pushing a lot of meaning into a tiny space, so make the most of it! Don't just use filler syllables, or it looks forced- like the syllables were your priority and not the poem itself.

/Blah blah concrit

That said though, I enjoyed these a lot. The characters of SZS are so whacked out, I'd never expect to see haiku on them. What a cute idea!

This is great! I love these.

Just a Japanese hinter:

Your title reads "haiku no zetsubou", right? That means "Haiku's despair". To mean "Haikus of Despair" (no apostrophe!) you need to write "Zetsubou no haiku".

I don't have time to check the other names, but I'm sure they're fine. Just a hinter!

Do you have any new chapters? Can you make more and they should be funnier, more poetic and ... ZETSUBO DESHITA!

If you're going to use kanji, then for the love of god, get it right.

I like these. Your style is different from mine (I always strive to be grammatically correct when writing haiku, but it sounds better if you don't).

As for the title – as anon said – 俳句の絶望 is wrong. Pretend no is an apostrophe ('). What you've written is, 'haiku's despair', what you want is 'despair's haiku', or the 'haiku of despair'; 絶望の俳句.

I especially like the haiku by Nami.

tee hee hee i love the haikus theyre so cute _ kep up the good work

These suck something fierce.

It's spelled haiku, or haikus, if you must. NO apostrophe.

Your grammar is severely broken as well in some of these.

The title is grammatically wrong as well. Your title translates into "Despair of haiku". It's the other way round - 絶望の俳句.

Generally, get a beta reader.

nice haiku, Nami's was particularly good.

gosh, why aren't there more entries in pink supervisor's section?

zestuboushtA!

Haha, cute little haikus. Love Hito Nami's:

"...Cannot finish this hakiu

Much too ordinary."

lol XD

Ha ha! The haikus for Nami, Harumi, and Matoi cetainly made me chuckle. Hardcore stalker and rabid fangirl...xD Great job!

SDB, the sarbid nuclear ninja hamham :3

This is a really good fic. By the way, a 'Sayonara Zetsubou Sensei' category has just been added, and your fic can be the first one put in there! You should switch this fic's categories as soon as possible!

Woah... somehow, it felt so poetic... great job though!

Nice use in your vocabulary, and I haven't spotted any spelling mistakes. Good for you! But some of your haiku's don't have the right amount of syllables. Try to fix that up, but anyways good work! D