Loved this story! I've been reading this story (and reviewing each chapter under the name Crazy Lady) since it first came out years ago and I'm so happy that you finally finished it! Bravo on the good work and the wonderful ending! I really loved this story so much! Thank you so much for this wonderful story and the wonderful work and writing you put into it! Thank you! I hope that one day you may write another Tasuki/Miaka fanfiction once again. I'm highly looking forward to it!
Until next time - Ja Ne!
Forever a fan of this story and it's writing - Crazy Lady aka Giai Kame
(Well, the review window is working, but now it says that I've already reviewed when I haven't, so I'm leaving my ch 10 review for chapter three. P )
What a heartpunding conclusion! You did a terrfic job of pulling all the loose ends together and wrapping them into a gutwrenching yet complete and satisfying ending. I'm glad Kouji was able to get past his anger to see the truth of the situation. Boushin's malevolence was rather shocking...how he will act from here on out is really the only unanswered question that I had...but one that doesn't require an answer, as it ultimately has no bearing on the outcome of this story.
I must tell you that I greatly appreciated the sensitivity shown in your portrayal of Miaka's judgement of Kurai- that was probably the most powerful and emotionally affecting moment for me in the entire story (which is saying something, as there were many such moments. I was impressed with the restraint mixerd with deep tenderness in the way you had Tasuki allow her time to decide when she was ready to move on. To have her flinging herself into his arms right after the fact would have made things seemed forced...and much less than real, you know?
Only concrit would be to watch that your verb tenses don't flip between second and third person...but I have a feeling you already know that. _
You should think about writing more suspense thrillers, imo, and definitely more for FY! But even if you don't...puppy dog eyes...I want to thank you so much for finishing this excellent story. Reading it made my week. :D
Yay, Elcyion's back! :D Can't adequately express how happy I am to see you continuing this excellent story! Your characterizations are right on, and the element of suspense is definitely top notch. You've definitely created a very chilling antagonist/bad guy in Kurai...*shivers*
Along with those things, I have deep appreciatation for the unpredictability you've put into this...throughout the scenes with Tasuki, Chichiri and Miaka, I was on pins and needles as to if she'd open the door or not. Likewish, in the 'battle' between Tasuki and Kurai, I honestly had no idea how that would turn out- my heart was pounding and my fingers were clutching my deskchair's arms throughout. O_O
I was really surprised that Miaka ended up where she did, but it makes sense that she'd want to warn them. An armed psychopath that's already taken one life- the threat to the people of Konan is great. Hopefully that last bullet will be prevented from finding its mark...*crosses fingers*
On the technical end of things, you did a pretty great job; the time off you took from writing has not diminished your skills. *grin* Don't know if you wanted concrit? For what it's worth, the only thing I noticed was a couple verb tense whoopsies in which past tense should have been used instead of present. *shrugs*
Ah! You actually ended this with *two* cliffhangers, didn't you? *grin* As frustrating as it can be for as a reader, as a fellow author I'm liking and appreciating what you've achieved...an exciting, nail biting read!
Thank you for an enjoyable read! I'll be looking forward to the final two chapters...
Every good wish,
KittyLynne
P.S. I'm sorry for leaving an unsigned review, but it's the only way I can leave one. For some stupid reason the site is saying that I've already reviewed this chapter, even though you just put it up..._;;
Looks like you might be updating this one again soon? If I am lucky? I really enjoy the concept of the serial killer, I really do, its ingenious. I am hoping for an update
*tear tear* aw its so sweat! i love it! please hurry with the next chapters - i honestly really like how you portrayed things, but it really sucks that kiku died *another tear* she sounded really cute. anyways, bum bum bum! - please hurry
Well, it took me awhile, but I'm finally back to leave you a proper review. _
First off, I want to comment on the content..._
This chapter was very impressive for many reasons.
your grasp and portrayal of the complex emotions present in the first scene are excellent.(I was especially moved by Tasuki's 'you think I don't know how it feels' declaration to Chichiri.) Kouji's reaction was shocking, yet very true to someone who is suffering an immensely painful loss. I also liked how Tasuki rose to the occasion and took charge of arrangements. Some may see this as insensitive, but I strongly disagree. Grief can be a paralyzing emotion (as you very effectively showed) and therefore it's a blessing and a help to have someone around who can help take care of the mundane but all too necessary arrangements.
I'm also impressed with how you're interweaving and gradually revealing the history and motives behind the psychopath's attacks. You're painting a realistic and chilling portrait, yet are keeping the element of suspense by not giving away too much too soon.
The scene between Tasuki and Miaka was well done. You're probably not going to believe this shipper is going to say this, but I'm so glad that you didn't have Tasuki and Miaka falling into bed. Instead, you're staying wonderfully true to your characters feelings and personas- you're mindful of the situation in developing their relationship, and doing it in a way that's feels totally natural, realistic and unforced. *Applauds you enthusiastically, then hands you cup of 'Major Kudos!' latte*
The ending was perfect. Tasuki's realizations and reaction to Miaka's lashing out really show how much he's matured, and they provide a sense of great anticipation in the reader for what's to come. ( I was very happy to see the 'to be continued, of course.' _
Let's see, what else? Technically, your spelling and punctuation are *excellent*. I did notice a small amount of present/past verb tense and grammatical errors, which I won't list here. If you'd like me to do the beta thing point them out, drop me a PM and I'll do so.
Believe me, I know how crazy RL can get, so there will be no badgering about updates from me. Just know that I'm enjoying B and V very much, and I'll be eagerly looking forward to your future chapter, whenever it's posted.
And I'm looking forward to the next chapter. This is a really good thriller! Keep it up!
KittyLynne not signed in 3/14/06 . chapter 7
Yay! You're over your writer's block! *celebrates with you* I can't leave an in depth review right now, but I'll be back later to do so.
Prelimninary comment: the psychological suspense thriller genre is your forte. In Kurai, you have created a very chilling and memorable psychopath...*shivers*
This fic is awsome. It's always good to see Miaka in pain. lol When are you going to update? I need more. We (the readers) need more. Please update soon.
oh! great story! I can't wait for what happens next! update soon!
misty haze 10/15/05 . chapter 10
Has anyone else noticed that little children tend to die horrible deaths in Fushigi Yuugi? In the first F.Y novel Kouji said he didn't have any family?
Dude this is a KICK ASS story! I'll be waiting for the next review._
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