Keep on writing!

It's amazing! I love it! But...is that all?!?!?!? Please tell me there's more?!

Alright. There are some problems with your…story…here.
1st and worst …
Self insert and Mary Sue! No! People want to read stories about the canon characters, not some story about you being all perfect and BS like that.
2nd Don’t bold the entire thing! Please! It makes a readers eyes bleed!
Tersa