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| TheNextSentinel 2005-06-08 ch 9,  | abuseThis whole story is awesome! It probably would've been good for me to read this one before I read the sequal, but I thought that this was part of the TV show. Great writing. Please keep it up. |
| Tangerine Dragon 2002-01-27 ch 9, | abuseGreat story. I really enjoyed it. I intend to read the sequel! Good job! |
| Tumbleweed 2001-10-10 ch 9, | abuseNot an entirely perfect story, but a good one, none the less. It's good to see how you've worked in just about all of the characters (Except for the talking Monkey) in some way or another. However, in doing this, you make the story kinda scatterbrainy. Furthermore, I would say that your action sequences need work. I think you have a good idea of just what's happening, but it doesn't strike me as particularly...intense. Maybe throw in some more vivid descriptions of the combatants, of the ordinance they're packing, the grand scale of destruction they're wreaking, etc. Nice to see that somebody's producing BG&R fanfic that's fairly readable, though. :) |
| P3anut 2001-09-08 ch 9, | abuseHey, this story is great! The plot is well written and moves along smoothly. Nice development of Poindexter's character and a great suprise toward the end. I really enjoyed Erika's concerned thoughts as Dwayne was in the hospital. I can't wait to see how you explore Dwayne's new robot parts. Wonderful, keep it up! |
| Vathara 2001-09-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou captured the not-quite-a-relationship between Erica and Dwayne wonderfully. And the end leaves a perfect setup for any number of stories. More, please? |
| Naphtali Phoenix 2001-09-07 ch 9, | abuseAbsolutely an excellent story! I will read the continuation now. |
| Jelsemium 2001-09-04 ch 9, | abuseMan, you had me on the edge of my seat right to the very end! I even snuck over during my lunch break at work to see if you had posted more chapters! This is totally awesome! Jill W. |
| CP 2001-09-04 ch 9, | abuseYay-ee! I loved it! Nice work! ^_^ |
| Zera 2001-09-04 ch 9, anon. | abuseawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww |
| Zera 2001-09-04 ch 7, anon. | abusegetting to the good part right@!!!! i love it1!! |
| LadyRagnall 2001-09-04 ch 6, | abuseThis is great. Keep up the good work. I can't wait to read more. |
| Jelsemium 2001-09-03 ch 1, | abuseGreat story! You really have the characters down, in my opinion. Lots of great action, too. I can't wait to read the rest of it. (Please don't kill Dwayne!) Jill W. PS, Katie, I had grey hairs when I was in my thirties, and my job isn't anywhere near as stressful as Dwayne's! |
| Zera 2001-09-03 ch 5, anon. | abusenoooo dont kill dwayne! |
| Katie 2001-09-03 ch 5, anon. | abuseWow! This is a very well-written story. The word choice is excellent, and the grammer and spelling are great. I hope we see many more works from this author. The story kept me hooked, and I didn't get lost, like many of the other stories. The characterization is right-on. I can't wait to read what happens next! P.S. Wait- How did Dwayne get gray hair? He's only 30. |
| Psycho Mime 2001-09-03 ch 5, | abuseOoh, that's great! I love it! Pleeeaaaasssseee continue? :) |