Really good story. I think you did an excellent job getting into Frank's head and interspersing his inner monologue with some cool bits of gallows humor. Great job on his thoughts toward Joan, Dave and Bumpo. While he may not show it outwardly, inside he does care a lot about these people and doesn't want to see any harm come to them.

Some typos I caught: "handgranate" should be "hand grenade."

"over friendly neighbors were God for Bumpo's soup" I'm assuming it should be something like "overly friendly neighbors were gone for Dave's soup."

"annoyes" should be "annoys."

"up there than Bumpo" should be "up there then Bumpo"

Enjoyable story.

I like this. your work is very good. ^_^

... That was the Punisher? Bulls/h/i/t! And talk about dumb and terrible writing. The movie was so much better than this.

First of all. Thank you for the review xWhiteorblackx :)

Secondly, yeah i've added some humor to this story, but not too much i think. And too talkactive? He actually doesn't say much during the story, these are mainly his thoughts.

Nice. Castle's a little too talkative and...humorous... but nice.