Good backstory for Baron Greenback. I like the idea that he and DM were associated in a different way in the past.

Great start! Looking forward to seeing how the rest of the characters came to be.

This was incredibly clever - one of the best DM fictions I've ever read! You incorporate the classic humour, an example being 'so secret even I don't know' etc. whilst putting a twist on the storyline. This is an intriguing idea regarding Greenback and DM's relationship. I really hope to see some more of your fanfictions soon!