Reviews for The Shocking Surprise

stargirlsidle
2007-12-04
ch 1,

abusegreat story...looks like it's going to be very interesting!
keep writing, i really want to know what's going to happen and why Laura seemed so mysterious about Brittas being missing!

have a cookie for posting a brilliant first story! :)

CatherineWinner
2007-12-04
ch 1,

abusehey darling, really enjoyed this.I think it's quite good to the characters and it also is lots of fun. However I think you should spend more time on it, be more descriptive and while just using dialoge to move the story along is fine, I think it leaves alot out...also when you use the letter U for the word YOU it doesn't help the story. But don't think i'm being harsh, this is soo good and trust me you DON"T want to see my first attempts as stories, you look like a goddess compared to me. ^^ Either way you'll get better and so will your stories! Please post again very soon and keep up coming with lots more in the future! *kisses*

Catherine~

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