She briefly looked at Cloud, than the slide

that "than" should be a "then". sorry, I know it's only a small thing, but I thought I ought to point it out oh person who wrote this ...*Cough*...bad review, I know.

the analogy is good. you related it to nature, something natural which made the memory idea that much more real. good job, you

Hey, great fic!

I really liked the way you kept things in character, and you have a great use of language.

The only thing that I felt was lacking was I felt that you could have emphasized the rain a lot more. I always feel that when you're out in the rain just for the fun of it (I love it!), it's everywhere, and it's such an overwhelming sensory experience. Rain has it's own smell, and you feel it drumming on your skin as it strikes you. After that you feel it dripping off of every part of you (I can perfectly see Cloud's hair turning into a dripping rat's nest). Your clothes become heavy and stick to your body, making it hard to move (leaving less to the imagination than usual, which could invite some comment in your fic, especially between THESE two).

Your characterizations are great, and I wouldn't change a thing, but I feel like the rain could be its own character in this fic. All it needs is a bit more sensory information from you. In any case, I love this fic, and I might even end up writing my own rain fic after a while (I have several other projects that I need to hammer out, anyways).

Keep up the good work!

Very good! I liked the start more than the end but that's just my personal opinion as i'm not a big Cloud/Aeris fan!!

Wow that was really good. I loved it sure it started off being happy and simple but grew to being far deeper than what I expected that's why I love the little moments people write between characters instead of long drawn out ones. Especially for Cloud and Aeris and you wrote this one really well I'm definately favoriting it.

Loved it. Great pace and no problems in sentence flow or grammar. Also kudos on the puddle analogy.