Really cool idea for the plot!! Keep it up! I like it !

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Good chapter today. Keep smiling and those fingers typing. :-)

Wow this is very good chapter. Keep smiling. :-)

i'm really liking this. keep it up.

so he's a ghost right?

I know you just published this yesterday, but PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE QUICKLY!

I enjoyed this chapter very much. :-)
Please update.

Well, it's early days yet but so far it's not bad - worth coming back to to see how it develops.

Grammare and spelling a little dodgy in places - "If only we had know. You still may be alive," should be "If only we had known. You might still be alive." "You still may be alive" would mean "I don't actually know if you're alive or dead" and that's clearly not what you mean. You mean "You might still be alive" - that is, "It's possible that you could have survived, although not certain that you would have done."

And it's spelled vial or phial, not vile. Vile means "really horrible or disgusting".

A nice and simple introduction to your story. It will be interesting to see where you are going with it.