I like this story. At first I didn't understand it, but now, since I've played KotOR, I can understand and follow the storyline. You have some grammar problems, and the game dialog is a bit off, but otherwise, it is a very good start. I'm looking forward to your next update.

Spark

I liked it. I liked the little things that Jack said. I do, however, implore you to read over what you have written before you post it, because this is definitely a first draft. It needs a good edit. There were tons of typos, misspelled words, and grammitcal errors.

Otherwise, I liked the plot. I cannot wait to read more.

This is a good fic. It was interesting to see a crossover with Star Wars. I would like to see this fic continue.


There are some errors you might want to look into:


Caps and lower case letters.


Punctuation/grammar.


Write more soon, please. :)

I don't really have a good idea of who Lillian is, but an interesitng twist - Jack is certainly coping.

Excellent. Torchwood + Star Wars = AWESOMEness. You really captured both Carth's and Trask's personalities well.