Reviews for Like Clockwork

Reviews For: Like Clockwork

Lorilei Mackenzie 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abuseHm...interesting. You make this story as listless as Xelha probably thinks her life/schedule is, and yet you still manage to slide in that powerful remark she made involving her feelings for Kalas. Very short, to the point. Excellent portrayal here. I like it!
Legacy Now 2007-12-06 ch 1,	abuseOMG... I... cried! WAAH! U R so good! Xelha-chan, hold on! Anyways, you did a very nice job with Xelha's emotions! That's it... I guess... Wuv ya! -Mokona!
Ruingaraf 2007-12-06 ch 1,	abuseAww, very in-character. Reminds me of Chronos Blow, somehow.
Fan Fan Girl 2007-12-06 ch 1,	abuseWhy do you keep writing about Xelha? You're just fueling my fangirlishness, you know that? You're making me like her even more! Gah! How come you can write angsty Xelha and I can't? XD No fair. Anyways, another excellent drabble. This one didn't have the same level of emotional impact as the others, but I chalk that up to two reasons... 1) You go through the tedious events of Xelha's every day life. I understand why you do this, but the activities seems so... I don't know how you would describe it... uninteresting? excessively normal? boring? I don't know, honestly. 2) The final sentence. This is supposed to have the most intensity but in my opinion it doesn't. Why? I think because you tacked "then sleep" onto th end. It would've probably sounded better if you had just written "From nine to ten I cry for Kalas" as one sentence, very simply, and then after that finish up with a sad "And then I sleep." Or you could even leave off the sleeping part, because the reader already has an image of Xelha crying herself to sleep over Kalas. But all that stuff is just nitpicky. I may not love this drabble as much as the others, but that doesn't mean I don't love it. :3 Xelha is an awesome character and it really is nice to read about her. You do a good job. Thanks!

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