This is a awesome story, I really like the character development and the plotline. It's really ordinal and a great read, I can't wait for a update

Wonderful chapter! I loved how you described the calm before the destruction started. If there is a hell, there must be in there, in those moments in which peace is so tricky.

How deluded the line between Skywarp and Thundercracker could be now, when TC gave up to what it needed to be done? Thoughts are unimportant and principles collapse once action is taken, and in this case there was no turning back.

Waiting already for next chapter.

Short, but good. You've written these pivotal scenes very well, especially Thundercracker's.

Looking forward to the next part!

I'm so happy you updated!! I love this story. Please don't make us wait to much longer for the next chapter.

Wow I can really picture this in comic version. The explanations are very elaborate, and the characters are very canon. Congratulations for this amazing fic! I enjoyed it very much, thank you. :D

That was... amazing! But what's this? It hasn't been updated since May? I do hope you are alright, and that this story has not been consigned to the pit. I apologise that I cannot express all I loved about this work of art, but as it's 3am in the morning, I seem to have misplace my eloquence. I hope to see the continuation, soon. Good luck.

(Lawd, either you went on an updating spree or I was gone longer than I thought…)
I had to reread Chp. 9 because I was totally lost and, inadvertently, I have commentary.

Chap. 9:
LMAO at the innuendo in, like, the first line. (Or am I the only one who sees it that way?) And triplechanger love. Squeeful. And Oh. My. God. Is that Skywarp evilness I spot there? *flails* (Vaguely reminded of Scrubs/Todd- “Betrayal Five!”)

Love the focus on Starscream and the beginnings of the douche we know and love. And his geekery. That was just solid awesome. So much so, that I almost missed the Chromia/Ironhide brooding. Twice. Seriously, my eyes just went: *skip* MUSTSEESEEKERS. Damn attention whores. And Starscream channeling Tyler Durden is amazing. Also; "It is time the hammer of justice was brought down upon your kind and we will wield that hammer" A little irony with your cup of megalomania, Starscream?

And: this is probably annoying but AFSKJRWDSJ, I have to get it out: first paragraph, fifth sentence: ‘severe clear’- Is that a mistake or jargon that I’m not getting? And first paragraph after the divide, fourth sentence- you put ‘heavily’ instead of just ‘heavy’. First paragraph after second divide, second sentence: ‘the’ not ‘they’. And the Decimus thoughts- fifth paragraph under fifth divide: ‘thought’ not ‘though’.

Chap. 10:
Not sure how I feel about the Starscream-Skywarp-Thundercracker interaction. I think I’m feeling some sort of righteous indignation for TC. Loved Soundwave’s small cameo. He’s one of the most constant characters (personality-wise) but authors always bollocks up his characterisation. I think you’ve got a nice level of loyalty/scrutiny going so far. LOL at fanboy!Scream. Too bad the whole hero-worship thing will be the source of his hate and treachery.

And: 2nd paragraph- extra ‘his’ before ‘gathered’. After the first break, after Frenzy’s speech- swap ‘at’ and ‘down’ and add a ‘the’. Third paragraph, third sentence, Soundwave’s POV- remove ‘made’.

Chap. 11 & 12:
OMG the badassery. I’m having a hard time expressing my fangirly joy right now (though TC pity party is still in procession). You’ve got such a good grasp of the characterisation and a great action-plot ratio *is genuinely jealous*

You ended on, quite possibly, the worst cliffhanger ever. I want to know what happens next! I cannot wait for the next chapter.

-bot

Very creative! Mass props! Sorry I haven't reviewed it earlier--I got sidetracked, but you already know about that! ;)

I really do admire your creativity, it is quite striking, the twists you throw in and allusions you make. There are many strings, but they all get tied up, none are loose (if that makes any sense!) And your allusions to the Skyfire/Starscream relationship are rather intriguing... are you gonna expound on that?

All in all, very well written!

-"me"

I can see why this chapter is your personal favorite.

Starscream was imposing as a dark and powerful avenger, perfect carrier of Megatron’s plan. Attacking the cancer from its very own core, that’s a very Decepticon way.

If the corrupted Empire was based on lies and appearances, why not using the same wires to suffocate it?

I liked the way Skywarp and Thundercracker never lost faith on their brother, especially Skywarp. The moment he shared with Starscream after Screamer freed them was very unique.

Brilliant work contrasting the opulence of the Senate, an isolated cell of corrupted and manipulated freedom against the misery of the people who found in crime the only path to survival. Starscream is so right. There are no such things as evil and good. It’s all about power. The one who inflicts the pain is in charge, and new ways of justice emerge when a political order is so full of filthiness as this ancient Cybertronian Empire.

No wonder why the Decepticon insignia will start to appear as the new shape of freedom.

Fast and quick.

I can see why it's your favourite, it's a very nice piece. It feels like it should be read in one breahless moment.

knew starscream wouldn't do that to TC and warp. awesome chapter. update soon please.

Love Starscreams sudden realisation of exactly what the fighting was really about and the interaction between Skywarp and Thundercracker. The little moment between Skywarp and Starscream is a nice touch too and does a good job highlighting the different aspects of the group.

This fic is like a painting. I can almost see Starscream as the big anti hero of a noir film, surrounded by smoke and vice, his personality evolving and maturing, as well as his ambition and power.

Megatron questioning Starscream was one of the best scenes you have written. Putting him against the wall, Megatron started to play his manipulation game, their complex relationship only starting, Starscream caught between admiration and his desire to lead.

As Starscream´s, Thundercracker and Skywarp´s personalities are also evolving into their definitive shape. Times for innocent crooking are over and marked mechs will have to behave like that. Brotherhood will be forced to find a way to coexist inside an upcoming war or perish.

This was a painful cliffhanger. I truly hope you will update soon my friend!

Oh! Whats happening here?, I´ts wow, you leave in the most interesting part. I can`t wait to read the next chapter,all fic change in seconds. Incredible work I love it, please continue soon!