Its a GREAT STORY. It shows the true feeling of endymion towards serenity. I love this story.. great job and keep up the good work.

Beautiful.

Oh.. my lord. That was so horrifically/wonderfully tragic and bittersweet. It's ideas like these that are the best to read.

You say the writing style is old. I did notice a bit of amateurish-ness (not a word, I'm sure ;;) in the beginning, but as it moved on, the story swept up the reader in its momentum. And that's when a truly gifted writer is recognized.

O gosh *i want to say something else but...kids read this stuff* that was unbelievable. It was much better than most of the fics i read here and you said it was one of your early works! wow. O and hey hey just so ya know...this made tears stream down my face. The darkness and the light is such a wonderful theme for stories isn't it!

*sigh* damn that was romantic...*grabs a tissue* and a tear jerker too. It fills in all the spaces there was in Serenity and Endy's love in the anime. You were right by the "unlearned and disjointed" part, some of the sentences don't seem to tie up somehow. But never the less, it was still well written. ( better then i can do! HEY! I'm only a highschool freshmen!) *Grins*

This is absolutely brilliant. From the plot to the characters actions. Amazing, a wonderful idea! Bravo! And no sign of Chibi-Usa, so I'm happy all around! Oh god, this is so perfect! Email me, I'd love to do a co-fic!

Very touching.

I love it...so simple and yet so absoulty true...