dang. that was awsome!

very good story, I love your descriptions, of to read more of your work!

Awesome story, Pi. I really liked it. You are a very good writer.

The Bubbly One,
Shell

In answer to your question, Hmm, that's a hard one...
YES!
I loved it, it was really good.

ohh... ; ; I loved it... it's so sad... poor Mikey... I like how you got Leo's emotions down too... ; ;
-Joce

I really liked it and i think you should add a second chapter

Don't you love it when an idea just hits you? Especially when the result is as fantastic as this. Leo's reflection and epiphany are so moving, and the whole piece is excellently written. Great job!

Elsie

I love it. I think it's brilliant how you display the night as a Ninja's mistress. It adds to the chaotic depth of the story; the darkness, but the unwilling understanding. I absolutely love it! The turtle death adds to it; shows you how the 'night' doesnt distinguish between good or bad. It makes it more realistic.
Bravo and a basket full of roses!
Well done. Kind regards,
xx

I did! I liked it! Even if it was horribly sad...but that's why we read, ne? LOL! Great work!

Oh no, I wasn't expecting that ending! Really well done though. It seems more introspective than anything, maybe just some reflecting, and then we learn about the quiet shadow and Mikey. Didn't see that coming at all...!

Its good to have you back! I hope to see some new work from you =D

*dies* twisted. Totally. Amazingly. Twisted. I wanna cry, damnit.

*sighs*
Pi, have I ever told you I love your writing? Your imagery is great, something I've never been able to achieve believably.

And it's true too - nobody cares about those women in Africa, or people being beaten to deaths in their homes or something. And it's sad - because they should care.

Anyways, sad, but very well written. Good job.

I love all of the metaphors and similies in this - it makes it very poetic. I don't usually like Leo POV fics, but I love this one! You really get to see how he tries to think logically despite the horror taking over and eventually gives an inch so he can get revenge. I love the one-sided conversation in the end, too. Like if he says all of it now Mikey can still hear it. You did such a great job!

...go get 'im Leo
that was incredible. best thing i've read for a long time