love the story

Omg. Thank you. For this story it was amazing. I love very much. I never really thought about Inuyasha being a softie and all. Its really good I love it! I'll take this as my late Christmas Gift from you. Hehe.

wow! that was so GOOD! I have a new favorite! talented writer!

I love your story about Inu and Kags that was a really romantic story , you made their first time together very romantic and beautiful. I love your stories

Loved the story. KUDOS!

um it's rendezvous not randyvous... and shouldn't it be are not were? but whatever, still good :)

That was different but definitely a sweet and cute one-shot! I like the "sweet-pea" nickname and the picnic was a really nice setting! I really enjoyed this!

Quote from Author: "Hopefully you won't find this too cliched, I avoided that whenever possible..."

Thank you, I am so sick of all these authors who use cliches; everything I read on this site is so cliche that I am about to hurl from un-origionality (I don't care if that is spelled right or if it is a real word because it's too late to give a s*).

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Inuyasha is a little out of character. He is being too romantic, and a little too out-in-the-open if you can understand that. Inuyasha is a person who, although does things to make Kagome happy, he would not have a 'picnic' (picnics are not Inuyasha's style. Plus this is a 'future' thing) and he would have been extremly modest (with romantic things), would have been bad with words, and, personally, I can't imagine him kissing Kagome's hand. This is only a problem in about 3 sections of your story all the rest is ok. Although I think that this is acceptable giving the situation, I still felt I should mention it.

"So, does this agreement make me your bitch?(said Kagome)" Kagome would never, never, never, oh and did I mention never say this. Kagome would not even understand "mating" (I hate this word. It should be banned from all Inuyasha fan fiction).

You are an excellent writer, but you need to understand that certain characters act certain ways This is the way they are suspose to act with exception to Alternate Universe Fiction that may have special cercomstances that cause a character to act different, such as a fic where Inuyasha's parents were still alive(His parents had an influence one him), or special event. Even with these exceptions, you must make a judgment on how much effect the event (exception) will have on the characters and tie the current characterization (the one with the exception) with the way the character would act in the origional composition.

If you want to make up new characters, write your own novel or what ever. But if you want to write fan fiction, you MUST keep the characters in context. Fan fiction is not just about keeping the story the same but also about keeping the characters the same.

Now! Thats all for that rant. I am sorry for bashing you about this but I am fed up with OOC bull s*. This review is probably just a side-affect due to a compolation of three things: reading too much fan fiction, being up at five in the morning (I have only gotten about 3 hours sleep the last two nights), and an urge to tipe(I know that this sentence sounds wierd but I just wanted to use the word "compolation" and a colon.) My thanks be to you for your time.

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I love you for having a High School Education. Most of the Authors I review have so many spelling or grammar errors that by the time I am through with a One Shot my head hurts. Spelling and grammar are key components to any tale (man am I running out of words for 'story' or what) and I give you a standing ovation for not being an idiot (un-like 93% of the authors on this site).

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Good job on your limon. I love your attention to detail.

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Yes, you are too hasty; remember "haste makes waste"

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7/10 love ya, signed caleb

Aw! I loved it!

The fact that they were really out of character was the best part. I love seeing them how they should be and stuff. Even though i love the super macho Inuyasha, this was the cutes thing ever. Im a total S&N freak, but the cute names they were calling each other just made my giggle like the innocent little school girl i never was. lol.

Good lemons too. I loved how they begun their foreplay with good ol' fellatio and cunnilingus. Best way to begin.

Great job!

YOU ARE AWSOME! ONE OF MY FAVORITE LEMON-LIME EVER WRITTEN. TRULY A WORK OF ART. THAT WAS SO GOOD I'M NOMINATING YOU FOR PRESIDENT.

Aww, Inuyasha sounded so romantic. =) It's a nice side to him. I liked it a lot. Keep up the good writing! =)

sincerely, nihongoneko

are you going to write more on this? i hope so. its really good, and it needs more chapters, i think. thanks for writing it, tho.

Yes! Your last comment was very good! Never good to be too hasty! Also, I liked that you carried on with the relationship after "the act". Most just build up to the sex, do the sex, and end it. You had a great build up, good original lemon, and then more relationship. This was snapshot in a pair of lives. This gives the characters continuation before and after this interlude and makes it seem more real and the characters more alive. THANKS!~EAK

you should write a sequel to this one...cuz it was awesome!

I loved it! It was sweet and had the perfect amount of fluff in it! I love how Inuyasha was sweet to Kagome. It was so kawaii! One lemon one-shot I would love to read over and over again! Loved it!