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| timeisfleeting 2008-04-06 ch 5,  | abuseYour writing is, as always, exquisitely crafted, and your characters are such a lovely shade of gray. I'm really looking forward to seeing the dynamics between the two. I adore it already and can't wait for the next part! |
| iiceangel3.o 2008-03-23 ch 5, | abuseI hope you update soon!! |
| Jacqueline42 2008-01-07 ch 1, anon. | abuseI have always wondered what is what like for the woman who came after Rose. Was she loved? What was her life like? This is a very well written story. I encourage you to continue writing--I can't wait to see what happens next! Sincerely, Jacqueline 42 |
| Oxalis 2007-12-19 ch 5, | abuseOh so excellent! I keep thinking, at the end of every chapter, that the writing has reached a sort of plateau, and will continue in the same vein, at the same level of tension and... and artistry for a few chapters, at least, but then the next chapter drags the story up to a whole new level. I can't wait for the next part! |
| Vilofied 2007-12-17 ch 5, | abuseWOW!! This is absolutely amazing! I always loved Cal in the movie...he was so hot, comanding...*swoons*. Anywho update real soon!! |
| D 2007-12-17 ch 5, anon. | abuseI enjoy reading this. ^_^ Augusta reminds me a lot of Scarlett O'Hara, actually, and I love how you portray Cal. Great story, and I can't wait to read more! |
| shariena 2007-12-13 ch 5, | abuseI kinda like it... :) update soon? |
| shortstef 2007-12-13 ch 5, | abuseWell that will make for an interesting clash: the fact that she finds the noise of the sea comforting while he finds it the total opposite. Wonderful awkwardness there too |
| Darkest Aminta 2007-12-12 ch 5, | abuseHe would not be so haunted if it were not for a conscience and yet, I would not trust him! Kimberly~ |
| Darkest Aminta 2007-12-12 ch 4, | abuseThe images you paint are exceptional. So many textures. I am enjoying myself. Kimberly~ |
| ChristinelovesPhantom 2007-12-12 ch 5, | abusejeeze. he is snotty. haha. how rude. well continue! |
| Shirl 2007-12-11 ch 4, | abuseHm...I think I actually prefer the present tense. It seems to work well with the style because we're so intimate with the characters' thoughts. I like the immediacy of the present tense. Just my opinion, of course. And by all means, experiment with style. That's the fun part of fanfiction! I really liked this phrase: "A mass of bejeweled humanity..." You also have a lovely way of describing setting. Loved the glimpse of Cal's vulnerability at the end. Please keep the chapters coming! |
| PhantomsHeart 2007-12-11 ch 4, | abuseThis is different! I love them both for their hidden weaknesses, and yet I hate them both for their brutal snobbery. So far I like the present tense of the previous chapters better, because it feels like us as readers are experiencing everything with the characters since we don't know any additional information, other than Rose is not dead. If it was a story happening during the Titanic, for example, past tense would work better because readers know what happens at the end of that one, obviously, but I really like the use of the present tense over the past tense of chapter 4. Just a reader's humble opinion. :D |
| Reltistic 2007-12-11 ch 4, | abuseTo be honest, I despise Cal Hockley each and every time I see Titanic (and I'm not even some passionate Jack and Rose fangirl or anything). Also, Augusta isn't too pleasant a character in my eyes at the moment either. So it's definitely the plot and your mad writing skills that are keeping me glued to this piece, even though I can't stomach the characters. That's just how well written it is. I just thought you should know what an excellent writer you are, though I doubt you needed reminding. :) |
| shortstef 2007-12-11 ch 3, | abuseAgain, great chapter. You capture Cal perfectly, and Augusta's 'friends' are perfectly snidey and nasty |