It's nice. I like that there was no obvious hookup. I like Sakura and all, but I don't like her with Sasuke(don't know why)

-Tsukiko-

kinda disturbingly good

This is sucha cool one-shot!! MAKE A SEQUEL! It has a lot of Irony in it too, and metaphore and simlies...yeah I was learning about those in English today! XD

Great job!!

~ihearttoast09~

Oh my gosh,
this was great!
Loved how you connected the rhymes to the end.
I thought this was going to be just a cute little one shot from when they were little, but... the end was shocking.
It's amazing how you tied that in; great idea.

If you ever get the time to, you should definitely turn this into something more. :)