Reviews for A family apart

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The Legendary Zero 2008-09-10 ch 12,	abuseA little strange, but awesome writing.
no one 2008-07-31 ch 12, anon.	abuseI loved you story as well as your other PoR fics but im wondering with a new CV game coming out and all maybe you can do one for Shanoa/Albus when the game is out but first we have yet to play it to know their personalties, story and so on.
KJContrarian 2008-07-19 ch 12,	abuseHunty - Great Bonus chapter - Very entertaining, as always. Laughed out loud when Hefner himself was the guy - Should've guessed it, but didn't, it was a great comic touch. I liked how you briefly touched on all of the characters in this bonus chap, but still stayed focused on Stella. LOL - I guessed Felicia, but only because I thought there might be irony in her maybe somehow winding up with an "Hourglass" figure. I thought of Stella at first, but thought that if she had done it, it might have been a way to "reach" Johnathan one last time...kinda psycho-ish... As I've said before, a great story - I enjoyed this - Especially since the longer it got, the better it got - 'Nuff said! - KJ
Reaper's Shadow 2008-07-03 ch 12,	abuseGreat bonus chapter! It was definitley worth the wait! For a second at the end of this, I almost thought that you made Stella a lesbian! Anyway, good luck with everything and I hope you are able to update your prequel soon! Later.
Bullet666 2008-07-01 ch 6,	abuselol charlotte is such a tease. XD i love this paring so much now, i seriously want to make a doujinshi of it or something.
Bullet666 2008-07-01 ch 5,	abuselol this was indeed one funny chapter, i'm sure glad my mom isn't that protective XD but then again i've only had like two girlfriends.
Bullet666 2008-07-01 ch 4,	abuselaughs so hard his sides hurt that was one funny as hell chapter. The thought of John being gay made me buts out laughing. good job on everything.
Bullet666 2008-07-01 ch 3,	abusethat was a pretty funny chapter, i love this pairing now. lol i still need to play the game though, i only have dawn of sorrow. good job!
Fenris30 2008-06-30 ch 11,	abuseI have to say I was pleased with this! A good OC(I usually fear the letters OC, but she was actually very cool! No superpowers, no strange stuff, just a believable character.) I don't own a DS(PSP girl here), so I haven't gotten to play PoR yet(I'd like to, though), but I didn't have to play it to enjoy this(I played about every other CV under the sun, though.) Liked Jonathan and Charlotte, too(they do look cute together.) Thumbs up here! Well done lemon scenes, as well. They were rather cute between the two.
36509 2008-05-26 ch 1,	abuseWow this is DA BOMB! This is going into my faves for sure! XD
KJContrarian 2008-05-24 ch 11,	abuseYou've surprised me - An extremely well written and enthralling final chapter. Most writers, particularly on , run out of gas at the end, but this chapter soared to the finish. It may have even been the best chapter - All aspects of the story were tied up nicely. Great job - I'm sad to see this come to an end. Felecia was really the heart and soul of the story. In a way, J&C were supporting parts, but I like how that made the story different. This was a very polished read, not your typical "hack and slash" plot. Thank you for writing about these characters - As I may have mentioned before, I found J&C two very interesting subjects, and it was great to see someone with your talents give us a written account of them. It was obvious from reading this that you put great effort and care into the project, and it has paid off, at least to this reader. My guess is Felecia on the Playboy pose. I assume she has somehow lost the weight?? Best wishes on your future writing! -- KJ Contrarian
Shenlong7 2008-05-24 ch 11,	abusewell i rather liked this story and the good character development of Felicia. Though I wonder if it might not be one of the twins due to money or trying to get their interest to notice.
Reaper's Shadow 2008-05-23 ch 11,	abuseSo sad that the story is now done, but I enjoyed every minute of it! As far as Felicia is concerned, she is a pretty good OC and manages to fit into the story well. Plus she is quite humorous at times. Now as for the Playboy thing, I have a question: Does it have to be from the exact issue that was in your story, or can it be anyone (excluding Marilyn Monroe) from any issue? Just want to know before I start searching. Anyway, great job once again and I hope you continue writing other stories such as this one. Cya
Sephyrr 2008-05-12 ch 10,	abuseNicely done. I like how everything just seemed to fall in place. I'm also glad that you didn't just make it a lustfest like some other stories I have read. All in all, a good work. I'd love to see more. There's not much criticism I can give due to others having covered most of it already.
KJContrarian 2008-04-29 ch 10,	abuseAnother very well-written chapter. Additional comments to come soon.

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