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Xxyuna4evaxX 2008-07-30 ch 10,	abuseSquue Muse again! Seriously, this fic is amazing!! I'd start to go crazy too, especially if mr.wayne was christian bale (drools).. i can't wait to finish reading this.. clicks onto next page
Xxyuna4evaxX 2008-07-30 ch 4,	abuseSquee!! I love this so much, i thought i'd best put that first, since my comp loves to cut off my reviews! Anyway, i think your story is soo sweet ^^ and i thought it couldn't get any better.. but then i saw muse lyrics (my favorite band), and fell in love with this fic even more xD
Heartsong's Fanfictions 2008-07-25 ch 12,	abuseShe is SO FREAKING LUCKY. I ADORE CHEESY! dfdfgfdg Adding to favs.
ibelieveintruelove 2008-07-25 ch 12,	abuseCute story! I had fun finding out what all the presents were and reading all the songs. I liked the Coldplay song and the Bon Jovi songs the best. Great job!
Matt the Batman Fan 2008-07-20 ch 6,	abuseEllie is smelling eggs and bacon in her dreams. Geez, and all I get to smell is that sewer water the Grim Reaper was chasing me through that time I teamed up with Mario and Luigi in the sewers of Venice. . . okay, I'll stop now. Oh, and you named Ellie's mother Naomi. I've got a Naomi in my story too! Oh (think little aliens in Toy Story). So the next gift will be at the dog pound, huh. Well, I just can't imagine what the gift'll be. Hey, does Ellie want one of the dogs here? We've got two who stay at the house and one who visits every now and again and I'm willing to box up any one of 'em. All right, I'm done playing around. I really do hope that you give a clearer reason behind Ellie would just sever all ties from everyone she knew in Gotham. I understand how she wouldn't want to talk to Bruce if they had some issues but why also avoid her friends and family. It's an interesting point to discuss, much like Ellie bringing in other people she knows into this little gift giving session. Okey dokey. Halfway through. Have to go workout now but I promise I'll get through the second half tomorrow. Ciao, my favorite writing Canuck!
Matt the Batman Fan 2008-07-20 ch 5,	abuseI think the opening part to this chapter is the best part so far. Your description of Gotham at dusk was nice and strong and also offered a good dose of foreshadowing. Still, I find it hard to believe that someone as smart as Eleanor would make such a silly decision to run down an alley way just to pass the time. The singing telegram was admittedly pretty interesting, although I would like to have seen more about Eleanor's reactions to it all throughout the stanzas. Sure she started and ended feeling embarrassed (as quite a few us would, I imagine) but was there a little something more there. And, I've got to admit, I'm still a little creeped out that Bruce is essentially stalking Ellie. Granted, it's something he'd do but still. . .
Matt the Batman Fan 2008-07-20 ch 4,	abuseOh come on, Eleanor! You know it's Bruce! You're smarter than that! All joking aside, I did like how you tried to cycle through Ellie's emotions on what she thought about the fourth day of Christmas (sorry, couldn't resist). Still, as much as I believe that the inclusion of the songs really goes against Bruce's character, you really picked a good one this time. It would be a perfect description of the challenges Bruce would have to endure in order to have a lasting relationship with someone. Boy, if only the comic book Bruce was this self-aware of his own faults. The grammar miscues during the chapter (seems like we're both addicted to unnecessary commas threw me off for a little bit but I did like the conversation between Ellie and Jess. Still, you've really got to worry about wandering into Mary Sue territory with all this. It's the big trouble of using OC's. Metrushkah gifts!! See, I can be somewhat random too!
Matt the Batman Fan 2008-07-20 ch 3,	abuseYou know what? After reading Reflection of His Enemy for so long I'm starting to miss Blaze myself. I liked that dog. Of course, that may be because of a certain little Chocobo here who is continually trying to bite me while I'm reading your stuff (pats the annoying little puppy). I'd really be interested in digging into just why Eleanor is so afraid of talking to Bruce about Batman. You opened up a truly interesting plot development and a nice source of tension for both of the main characters. Adam seemed like an all right character as well but it's nice to see your knack for writing conversations has improved over the last six or seven months. :-). Honestly, I wouldn't know what to think if somebody gave me a picture of me with a beloved former pet. Still, I suppose Bruce read her potential reaction properly so points for him.
Matt the Batman Fan 2008-07-20 ch 2,	abuseI really liked the way how you presented Lucius. I could almost hear Morgan Freeman (a fellow man of Memphis) delivering the lines and the concern behind him. Pointing out Eleanor's inability to remember a lot of the familiar faces and her decision to plow into her work made her look very normal and very human (which, yes, is a good thing). Bruce seems a little off to me, perhaps because I'm more aware of comic Bruce's mannerisms than movie Bruce's mannerisms. Still, if I were Eleanor, I'd be a little creeped out if I found out that somebody who appeared to be interested in having a relationship with me was clearly stalking me. Still, I imagine that Bruce would be enough of an off-kilter puppy to do something like that. . .
Matt the Batman Fan 2008-07-20 ch 1,	abuseWell, it's pretty clear that you've long had a knack for describing the emotional mindset of your characters and the physical atmosphere around them. Still, and you've probably realized this by now so please don't beat yourself up for it, the grammar mistakes, particularly at the beginning, really put a damper on opening the chapter. It's always good to set a good first impression after all, even in the sequel of a story. Still, the description of Eleanor's mindset while she was on the plane was very good as was your depiction of her exhaustion when she arrived at her apartment. Still, I have a hard time believing that someone as socially stuck in the mud as Bruce Wayne would know the lyrics to a Matchbox 20 song :-p
Berries-R-Blue 2008-01-26 ch 12, anon.	abuseI thought it was a wonderful story that had the right element of comedy and romance. When Bruce said that the guy must be cheesey I laughed, trying to imagine a cheesey Burce Wayne.
Lu 2008-01-10 ch 12, anon.	abuseWhat a nice ending. That was really well done and I enjoyed reading it a lot. I could literally feel her relief. A very worthy last chapter, indeed. Thank you very much. I couldn't have chosen between neither of the songs, as well, since they're both beautiful. Thank you very much for writing this story and for sharing it with us! Keep up the great work and good luck with your other stories.
sarah 2008-01-09 ch 12, anon.	abuseOh my lord, you have no idea how tense that made me, lol Your writing was brilliant, I thought it was gonna be him, but by your writing I really wasn't 100% lol Hear hear to cheese, x
Lu 2008-01-08 ch 11, anon.	abuseI really enjoyed this chapter and by now I'm about as excited as Eleanor is. :) Because, you know, you DO make very good work of keeping up that tiny, nagging, doubtful voice in her (and my) head that, after all, it is not Bruce. And how disappointed she would be if it wasn't him. I love how you describe this emotion. On the one hand one is certain that it HAS to be that person and yet, it seems so unbelievable that one cannot help but have that doubt in one's mind. I've never read a 'secret admirer' story that was pulled off so feasibly. Very nicely done. I like how you don't rush things and have your own pace in getting the story to where it ends. Also, the UST and tenderness moments you put in, make my stomach flip. Wonderfully done. Thank you very much for writing and for sharing. Looking forward to the next installment! Lu
sarah 2008-01-04 ch 10, anon.	abuseHey another great installment, this guy really had better be Bruce lol x

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