That was a very good fic,

It was a window into Colby's life,

I thoroughly enjoyed it :)

Loved it! It`s well written and I could feel Colby`s pain literally.
You described his background story as well as his current "phobia" pretty good. Very, very good story!

This one is great too!
The fire image is awesome, I really felt like I was there.
No way would Colby wait while someone was burning to death (although that would go for any of our Feebies).
I must admit, when Megan said she'd fix Colby's fear of envelopes my mind went to a not quite PG place, but I'm blaming the ep of That 70s show I saw today!
This is a great fic, another for my fave list.

Very sweet!

You said you had changed wording of this story and re-edited it, so I say you accomplished
your goal. You have it polished to exactly the right shine.

It's excellent! Poor Colby. He's gone through a lot in his young lifetime.

Thank you for giving us this look at him.

Great fic! I love everything about it. It's nice to see a Colby fic, there aren't many around. I really like the friendship between Colby and Megan, and it's all in character. Well done!

This rings very true to character. Excellent job with the backstory, well blended in to make a coherent whole.

I think I missed something, though, because it looks like Colby knows something about Megan I don't remember. What fear does he already know?

It doesn't quite feel complete, to me. The theme of the needles could be better wrapped up. He's still got the vaccination hanging over his head, there's no resolution there. The envelope thing was very sweet, though! Maybe I just want more because I enjoyed it so much.

Great piece, excellent characterazation. Keep writing.

great job..

That was amazing! You captured everything...just perfectly! You're an awesome writer, and I can't wait to see more from you.

Kas

Wonderfully done! You used some seriously amazing imagery to describe all of Colby's fears, including the envelope (I had a phobia of doorbells and knocks on the front door for a good 6 months after my best mate over in Iraq - a USMC Leiutenant - put me down as his next of kin, for much the same reason) and the offer from Megan was beautiful and realistic. You rock.
-CJ

Beautifully written insight into Colby Granger's head. When Don made the announcement about the vaccinations and Colby mentally winced at the thought of another needle, I thought, of course, that's makes sense! But, I had never thought of it before. The flashbacks in Afghanistan and being notified of his father's death were heartbreaking and very well done. And, finally, Megan reaching out to talk to him about his fears and effectively helping him overcome his dislike of envelopes was inspiring.

This story shows the time and effort you put into it. It is well written and even though there are a few jumps to flashbacks and different times, it was easy to follow and enjoyable to read.

Thanks for sharing and I sincerely hope to see more of your work.

Great Job.. You really caught the characters in this particular Story. Keep Writing more.