Damn. I am in awe. You set this jazzy sort of mood, if you can understand that. I can sort of hear smooth jazz in the background, I swear.

"You hear his deep sighs when he tickles your cheek with his eyelashes."

Ooh, gives me chills!

This was beautiful, surreal, dark and...smoky. Great work!

~Jen

Lol, on the bottom of the page is a 'no smoking' warning!! Awesome story

0_0 I think I'm in love. Finally, somebody who appears to understand the beauty of smoking! I loved this fic, it was so damn good, all the description, just all of it! x

Please excuse me for a moment while I catch my breath, I don't think I took a single draw in while reading that. From the first sentence I was drawn in just by the simple mentioning of smoking. Its a common act, most people do it but to emphasis it to the state of erotic nature without the physical contact between two people left me with a lingering aftertaste for more.

The perspective is strange in the second person, not because its badly written but its rare to find stories in such form and for my second experience with it, the first left me with a foul taste in my mouth like the after effects of smoking but this piece was a work of amazing skill especially to pull of something that can go awry with a new misplaced words.

You are truly a respected writer for creating such works even more applauses since I don't like the pairing. You have made me curious at least but still not enough to to tip over to a liking but of course a simple fiction will not do that since my feelings towards them stay firm.

Nice...I'm adding it to my C2!XD

Wow, that was really nice. For some reason, I've always loved the image of Sasori smoking a cigarette. You did very well the second-person POV, too.

It's very pretty and I like how it's written, but I can't add it to the C2 becuase SasoDei is a very common pairing. Now if it was something like ZetsuDei or SasoTobi by all means, jump in.

Какая потрясающая вещица! *сердечки в глазах*
Вкусная и атмосферная до безумия, очень проникаешься ощущениями Дейдары.

И у меня курящий Сасори - фетиш настоящий, арт-то такого днём с огнём не сыщещь - редкие иппонские художницы нарисуют набросок - и всё - а уж про тексты... а тут целый фик, с концентрацией именно на этом... оох, мечты сбываются)
Спасибо вам!)

И да - узнается именно русский стиль) На англицком такое читать - просто отрада для души. Устаешь от сухого-рубленного, в какой манере обычно и пишут, хочется чтобы текст - как мед на языке перетекал.
А на русском у вас есть Сасодеи? Или вообще по Наруто?