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| johnnyd2 2008-07-01 ch 1,  | abuseI found it funny how Red reacted to buying condoms, weird, yet funny. More championshipping goodness. |
| Yozoro-Kitsune 2008-05-23 ch 1, | abusePoor Ashy... So clueless. He slightly reminds me oof my younger brrother asking me about that when he was little. Good times. ^^ And of course, Lance doesn't mind explaining, but he doesn't like to wait either. :3 |
| Mexman1993 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abuseHa Lol! You know I can just see Ash actually doing that in the anime. He might be a good Pokemon trainer, but I have feeling that he is completely "clueless" as you say on other aspects of life. Anyway yeah you didn't have as much description as you do and your other stories but it seems that you were more focused on the interactions between Lance and Ash so that's ok. The voice was somewhat flat but you gave across your point so no worries. Overall good little one shot. Irvin Z. Martinez |
| kawaiilittleeevee 2007-12-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseYay! So cute! |