Reviews for Jade Alternative

Reviews For: Jade Alternative

Layana Danare 2008-04-21 ch 3,	abuseHey, I'm liking it so far. It's very.. different from all the other stories out there that I've read. One thing that was a little weird was the sibling bond. Now, that may be just a simple bond between brothers and sister, but it seems like it's a force bond. Also, I don't know if they would have much time to form a bond if Cassie and Max have been away for all/most of Kylus' life. But I like it, and I can't wait to read more!
Layana Danare 2008-03-08 ch 2,	abuseNice cliffhanger! That makes me want to read more! I do have a question though, why would Luke not test the boy before Mara and Lando left? Okay, okay, sorry, my mind finds little annoyances that don't make sense and then I have to say, "it's a STORY, for cryin' out loud!" As far as I can see, Cassie's a little boring, as if I can predict her reactions to everything, how about throwing a twist in there? Max isn't doing anything for me either, and Kylus... well, obviously I want to see what happens to him.
Layana Danare 2008-03-08 ch 1,	abuseWow, your descriptions of scenery are very good, I'm impressed. I can't quite seem to get the knack. I like the way you do Luke, even though it's a bit different than the way I see him. Also, I adore the idea of MaraLando, very nice. With a critical eye... Hmm, I'd say you need to watch punctuation in several places, for I noticed a few mistakes, but I'm aware that mistakes happen when using a keyboard. For content, I'd say that what I've seen is overall good and I will wait for more!
JadeTakashi 2007-12-17 ch 1,	abusethis is a really interesting story. I've never actually thought of exploring the what if Mara and Lando... situation. LM has always meant Luke and Mara, but I suppose Mara could have stayed a smuggler/master trader forever. This is a very well written story. It flows well, great beginning chapter. I like the way you've examined every character's emotional state in a situation like this very carefully. Its always good to show that sort of thing when so many dynamic characters are involved, especially when they have a dynamic past like the past these characters have. The intricate connection you have created here is displayed very well. I like the subtle chaos of what's going on here, the way you show the distance between characters and yet the intimacy between them as well. I like the way that intimacy and the distance sort of meld into each other as well. The subtlety of this story is beautiful and well defined, but you have also placed points in this story that are sort of out there... in short, I love it. can't wait for more. [sorry about the long drawn out review, fingers wouldn't stop thinking of stuff to say.]
Mara-the-Cat 2007-12-14 ch 1,	abuseOne saying...EEW! JADE AND CALRISSIAN?! IT'S LIKE PEANUT BUTTER AND SARDINES! IT JUST WONT WORK!

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