Your story is good, but *isn't there always a but* in the kirby games, kirby is only a baby starwarrior and will always stay that way. This means he can't talk. I can see where you are taking this and the fact that your main character can't talk is kind of lame. Keep up the good work!

Well, It's funny. Good job, flamerextinguisher, i LOL'd a few times. Stays true to the spirit of the kirby games. Not PERFECT writing, but it works.