I loved the way this story flowed. You portrayed Darry perfectly, in my opinion.
The next line was definitely my favorite part.
"That was my favorite shirt." "Well now it can be your favorite rag."

you did a really great job on this. i could see the whole seen playing in my head. i loved the lines too, about the shirt, and the fight told but tim. i loved it.

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“Shoot kid, scars are just tattoos with better stories.” Tim laughed, gazing at the cut with admiration.

I really liked that line. :)

This was a good one-shot, I think - a nice window into Darry's thoughts and how he puts up a front to make it look like he's holding things together when in fact he knows he's in over his head and is doing his damnedest anyway.

Nice work. :)

I liked your idea with this. The only thing is that I think it should have been two separate stories. One about Dallas and Tim and their fight and one about Darry and how he feels about what his life is and how it's changed and what he wants from it.

Pay attention to your punctuation a little more, too.

I liked the way Tim and Dallas embellished the fight story and everyone knew they were full of it. Good job overall.

Yay! What a cute story! I love Darry stories, and you do his voice very nicely.

Hehe, I love this.

“That was my favorite shirt.” He gasped out.

“Well now it can be your favorite rag.” I really didn’t have time for this, it was stained anyway.

That part made me giggle. =D

Great job!

Hey...that was sweet. God I love Dally, the weirdo...I can acctually see how this all fits in with the story. Is this soon after the parents died? Good job!