Well done! You can def. compare your previous chapters to this one and notice a difference.

staring me down with those crazy green eyes of her.
I believe that you mean "hers".

“Neither to do.
... What's this mean?

“Yes. I came out here to find something interesting to photograph.” She smirks, inhaling deeply on her smoke.
It's that damn capital that shouldn't be capitalized again:P.

“Your very good at guessing Mr. Garwin.”
Wrong "your". It's "you're".

“I suppose. Your pretty full of surprises yourself.”
Again: "you're".

“The train station.” She states simply.
You really should be more leniant on those capitals... They need a break, you know:P.

“Reid, you already asked me what my favorite colour was.” She laughs softly.
More capitals.

“Oh, please Reid.” She groans.
Again.

“I agree completely. I needed a break from the city.” She sighs, looking out the window.
Again.

“It is rather thrilling isn’t it?” She whispers, her green are sparklingly with excitement.
Again. On a side note, I just noticed now that she speaks very British-like. At least, it seems that way to me:P.

“I’m very glad I ran into you when I did.” She says simply, leaning back in her seat and casually lighting a cigarette.
Again. You want to know what else I've noticed? You like writing about characters who smoke.

“It must have been good fortune that’s all.” I say.
You should have a comma between "fortune" and "that's".

“Let’s order drinks.” She says enthusiastically, picking up a drink menu off the table. “Do you like beer?”
Again.

“Why not?” She retorts, clicking her camera as she captures the shot she wants.
Again. I don't know what Reid's problem is; personally, I love the stars:P:).

“I once sold a photograph of a meteor shower for 500 dollars.” She grins. “Many people find the sky of interest.”
Again.

She stands up and I follow suit.
She puts out her smoke and packs up her camera quietly.
This should all be one paragraph.

“Goodnight Reid.” She smiles before disappearing into her hut.
Again.

Oh, this sounds like a promising story line! Haha, I'm thinking that I should watch The Beach so I have a better idea of what's going on:P...

I only found two mistakes this time:)!

'“Of course! Just think; it would be such an adventure. That’s the whole reason why I came out here in the first place. To find something new, to get out in the world, to discover paradise.”

“And if you ask me,” I add, slamming my hand down on the map. “It looks like it was just handed right to me, so to speak.”'
Once again, the second part of the dialogue should be with the first:).

'All ready in my inbox is a stupid forward from Pogue, something about crazy collage girls gone wild.'
I'm thinking that you want the word 'college', instead of 'collage'.

Good job:)!

I like, I like:). This sounds a lot like Reid; he seems to be the type of person to do this type of thing. AWESOME job:).

I found a few (alright, make that quite a few) grammar mistakes, nothing major.

'“Yeah, so where you like to go?” He asks,'
'He' shouldn't be capitilized; it's still part of the quotations.

'1 Thai baht 0.033001 U.S. dollars, so trust me, that’s a very good deal for a 40 minute cab drive.'
First off, you should put something like "is" inbetween the Thai baht and American dollars. Second, I don't really think Reid would be that precise... Try something like "0.03 dollars".

'I purposefully planned this to be a spontaneous trip after all. “Okay, room number 456 is yours for two nights.” She dangles a chunky key in front of me and I take it.'
The dialogue from the clerk should be in a new paragraph.

'This girl; walking towards me from the end of the hall.'
Inbetween 'girl' and 'walking' should be a comma, not a semi-colon. Nice try though:P.

'Her bone structure was flawless, but her face wasn’t perfectly even toned and make up with layers of makeup.'
I'm thinking that you mean "made up", not 'make up'.

'“Having difficulties?” She says to me, stopping in front of me.'
Once again, 'She says' is still part of the previous sentence, thus, it must not be capitalized.

'“Try the one on the West Street, it might suit you.” I’m tempted to yell back at her, ‘and what do you mean by it might suit me?’ But I think better of it and instead I thank her, and then hurry out of the hotel.'
Once you start off in 'I'm tempted', it should be a new paragraph.

'I grin, that bitchy receptionist things she’ll have a laugh sending me to some crazy Irish man’s pub.'
I think that you mean 'think', not "thing":P.

'No, that the lame excuse for a movie staring matrix boy, I’m talking about the real, nitty gritty Constantine; crazy Scottish bastard, always smoking and drinking.'
K, you got your commas and semi-colons mixed up. Inbetween 'boy' and 'I'm', you should have the semi-colon, and inbetween 'Constantine' and 'crazy', you should have a comma.

'“Boy, it’s hard to ** find.” “No **,” I reply, as Patrick passes me yet another shot.'
'"No **,"' should be in a new paragraph.

'Constantine like indeed.'
There should be a hyphen inbetween 'Constantine' and 'like'.

'“Paradise.” He murmurs thoughtfully.'
'He' shouldn't have a capital.

'“Hah, crazy. What does anyone know about crazy anyways.”'
At the end, this should be a question mark, not a period.

'I swear it.” I say, giving him a boy scout’s salute. T
his guy has got to be out of his ** tree, he’s as nutty as they come.'
I'm thinking that the 'T' should be with the rest of the word:P.

'“I’ve had enough for tonight lad,” he says quietly. He pauses, and frowns slightly.
“It’s been nice knowing yah Reid,” he grins and turns.'
The second dialogue part should be up there with the first:P.

You can open your eyes now, lol; I'm done:P. I still retain my previous verdict, GOOD JOB:)!

really cool chapter!! Update soon!!

cool story props to you for coming up with a new perspective : ) I like it update soon!

I seriously want to know who that woman was with the accent and what's in that leather thing. I like it a lot. I never expected an Irish bar in Thailand. Well, good luck with Reid finding paradise.

oh,wow, awesome start! got that next chapter done yet? lol. update soon,please!