Oh my goodness. Interesting chapters=)

Hello :)


I really enjoyed the characterization of Tom Riddle, you're absolutely briliant ^^ Moreover, if you're planning to continue writing this fic I must be one of constant reviewers, otherwise I would be struggling with myself to bang my head on the wall! Moreover, the first chapter was indeed great, thereofore unnaceptable to stop and leave this in hiatus.

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Well, it could have been explained a bit better, but it wasn’t bad nonetheless. And, well, Lord Voldemort is whatever he is because of his parents, and in some ways… his ancestors and the circumstances. He is not to be pitied. The child Tom can be perhaps, but the adult can not… It is really very complicated, but the sad thing is, you can’t defend him, but you don’t feel like hating him either after reading BHP and DH…
Like I said, it’s really messy…

Cool, I want to read more of this!
-Emma-lee Baldwin

This looks intresting. I'm looking forward to see the next chapters. :)


Reader W.

Aww that was very sad and very very well written =) It's simple but effective and amazing!

Pinky_x

Hmm, this is interesting. I can't honestly ever see myself feeling sorry for Voldemort, but this young, tormented Tom seems almost an entirely different person. Would like to read more soon.

Very interesting, making Tom the victim, and well written.

I like the way you convey the children's malciousness, as you read you can clearly hear in the head the sing-song voice the kids would have used to provoke Riddle.

Thanks for reading, I look forwards to reading more ^^

RKC x

Oh, who entered the room?! You must tell me. Or you must up-date ;)

Very nice! If anything I wish it was longer so I could get more into the Tom you've sketched here. It's an interesting thing to twist it so Tom is on the side of bullying. I liked it! : )

Interesting. But I felt Tom was portrayed a little too scared and timid, you know? A shade more probably. But good chapter.

I really enjoyed this. You have the measure of Tom quite well, something which is very hard to pull off. =] The characterisation is excellent, and I like the way it references Dumbledore's quote.

I did find one mistake ("envoke" should be "invoke") but other than that, I did really enjoy it.

This looks like it's going to be interesting. A young Voldy- now there's something you don't see often, and it really is a pity.
Longer chapters would be nice, this one's over far too quickly. Maybe delve a bit more into Tom's thoughts? That would make it all the better.
All in all, this is very good. I'm hoping for some updates soon ;D

I'm very impressed - you created the image of a lost, lonely boy extremely well. You turned the canon back on itself, and gave Tom the sympathetic perspective. Very well done.

A little bit of concrit:
Prologue is spelt incorrectly;
and this line grated: "He could hear the other children running back to their rooms, slamming the doors to their rooms shut." - perhaps because of your repetition of the 'their rooms'. Instead, maybe, you could shorten the sentence to "He could hear the other children running back to their rooms, slamming the doors shut." ?

I have a C2 community and forum called the Reviews Lounge - I'm going to archive your story, in the hope that it gives you some more, well deserved attention!

Lexie