   AttiXZaney-foreva
2009-01-03 . chapter 2I love the fic, it's orginal, interesting and I like the fact it takes place after the show ends (not many fics do) because the way the show is supposed to have ended just left me depressed, Zane and Atticus aren't even in it (so I've heard, I haven't actually watched all the way to the end and I'm not planning to, though I might for Darkness/Nightshroud...). I mean, their relationship just seems to drift away, it's like they were never friends or anything at all (I blame 5D's, they had to rush GX because 5D's was coming out). Anyway, enough about that, I think your story flows really well and there are about two sentences that don't make sense, where you probably put in the wrong word (i.e. no, instead of know), but other than that your grammar and stuff are perfect. I hope you update soon because I really like this story (I'm not just saying that because this is my favourite pairing) and because you'll probably get more reviews that way, people tend to avoid fics that aren't at least more than ten chapters long, unless they a) are bored b) their favourite pairing is in it c) the person who wrote the fic tends to update regularily (sp?)( I hope this doesn't end up coming off as a jab at you because it's not!) or d) the summary sounds really interesting and orginal. Also , maybe, if you wrote the pairings in the summary, you'd get more reviews and more people would read your story. There are other people out there who like Zane X Atticus or Chazz X Syrus. I, personally, only read it because I was looking for a Zane X Atticus fic (the pairing is so underappreciated T-T) and since you never stated what the pairings were, I was hoping aginst hope it would be a Zane X Atticus pairing. Not much else to say...except, man, I talk alot. _ _ ;
Update soon! Please, don't kill it off! |
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