| Reviews for Danny Phantom: Bad Breakup |
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Jade'sPetDragon 3/30/13 . chapter 1Yes love it this was great I really feel the live those to share and the box ghost bashing is great that guy is so annoying. Burner:"Tell me about yesterday he tries to use some car parts I had stored away for "evil" so I beat the tar out of him." |
e 6/18/12 . chapter 1 I loved it it was very detailed and I loved the wayit ended " the sounds of laser fire and the shrieks if the box ghost echoing into the night" that was amusing to say the should make mord like this |
Lilith 10/4/11 . chapter 1 A long time ago, I read this same story on a different website. Now I was bored and wanted to read some random fanfics. then I found this story and was thinking oh my gosh, somebody wrote a story with the same exact idea as the other author. Then I read the author of this story's name and I laughed about how stupid I am when I saw the same author wrote this story. That was wierd. Oh, by the way, I love the story. It's really awesome. |
DannySamLover20 12/4/10 . chapter 1nice! loved it! |
Mz. Jinky 9/4/09 . chapter 1aww that was sweet... very good. |
Data Seeker 8/7/08 . chapter 1Dear Aaron13 Very good story. The plot is interesting, and the quality is good: Good dialog, humor, profoundness, interactions and realism. The beginning is good, Sam and Danny stop Spectra and her minion once again. The following scenes are good, Sam is tempted to use powers...irresponsibly and Danny rebukes her, and reminds her of the times he was wrong to use his powers for his own purposes, and she realizes that he’s right. I can sympathize with Sam. I would be tempted to misuse my powers (if I ever got powers that is). Then Paulina tries to ruin the moment but doesn’t get succeed due to Sam’s quick wits and smart mouth. The scene with Dash and Tucker’s robot was funny too. The scene with the ghost discussing their defeats was in character, and their plan is clever, if it can work. The following scenes are amusing (in a goofy sort of way) where the ghosts try to ruin Sam and Danny’s relationship and its just a giant annoyance to Sam and Danny. Then Sam and Danny try to pretend to break up so that their enemies will think they won and leave them alone. Its amusing and realistic that their enemies are skeptical about the breakup and watch them constantly, and Sam and Danny’s plan doesn’t go as well. And its very emotional that they can’t tell their friends about their plan and they can’t see each-other much so to keep their enemies in the dark. I never thought a pretend breakup could be that painful. The plot twist with Danielle was interesting. The following scenes are amusing with Danny’s friends attacking the Ghost Zone and Sam and Danny are alert by Frostbite and show up to explain things and put a stop to the mess they indirectly (and their enemies directly) caused. The wrap-up scenes are emotional where Sam is worried about her future and Danny is comforting her; then –BOOM- The BoxGhost shows up and its humorous, and its not a dump joke, or the type of funny joke that ruins the story. The wholesome standards are high. The language is clean. And certain situations and details through the story are vague and handled well. GREAT JOB! No extreme violence or any other vile content. I hope this review has a good influence on you. God bless. Data Seeker |
Phantom Misfit 12/22/07 . chapter 1That's a really good fanfic! I loved it, and the plot! Especially the end, when Sam said how sad she felt. That really wraps it up. Just some pointers... Ease up on the exclamation points. Just use them if there's a really actiony scene. You use the word soft a little too much. Some other words you could use would be gentle, sweet, you know. Other than that, I absolutely loved it, it was amazing! Spelling was great, and the robot Tucker was an awesome idea! Keep on writing. |
Dancos 12/17/07 . chapter 1I LOVE it I love all your storys You're a great writer |
pottersparky 12/17/07 . chapter 1I like it! The ghosts were really silly thinking that they could make danny and sam not be together. I think it was kind of fun that danny and sam's friends belive it it and teach those ghost lesson they never forget. I just know those ghosts will never learn. I like it that you add frostbite into it. I still think that jack would bug danny night and day to go ghost hunting with him. I think sam is right what she said to pualina. She could had prince chaming and let slip away. I think dash is out of his mind picking on the mayor of A.P. He could go to jail or be put out school while. Then parents might send him to millrty school. I think it cute that danny will not let sam to use her powers for her own fun. Still danny being danny would like to use them on dash when he gets out of line. Anyway a anothe great story I look forward to more stories in the future. Very well done! |
truephan 12/17/07 . chapter 1Very nice! I really like the Danny-Sam team both with their powers and their relationship.I especially like how you show them being friends and sweethearts at the same time. So very good balance of their maturing realtionship. I'm not a fan of Danielle and probably won't be. I never found her character plausible, even when accepting all the other 'implausibilities'! heh-heh! But I can see where she had a part to play in this story. I, of course, like Tucker to be more involved, but under the situation, he was fine. I do not think of his role/character as only comic relief. I find him a much more vital piece of the Phantom team, and reflect as such in my stories. I found the appearance of Frostbite a bit out-of-the-blue. It was so obviously a 'deus ex machina'. And then he was only along for the ride after that. Maybe he could have been more involved in the fighting, or left as soon as he came? Just a thought, of course. The story was still good and this litle thought can be forgotton! Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed this story. You know I love that Sam has ghost powers too, so it's only natural that she and Danny are truly meant for each other. But then again, I think that even if Sam DOESN'T have ghost powers! talk at you |
korel.c 12/16/07 . chapter 1Hey, dude, nice story. It's long, it's got plot, it's got some romance, pretty cool. The only problems I have with it are the lack of explanation of how, exactly, did Sam get her powers, and - dude, lighten up on the exclamation marks. I understand if you gotta emphasize some of the sentences, but action doesn't need exclamation marks to be really good. The !s just make the really good action really cheesy, so a couple of replacements with fullstops would lead to more suspension of disbelief. Otherwise, I look forward to more stories in the future. Scribere jussit amor. -KorelC- |