Realy touching. Nice story. How about a sequel?

Hi I think that the story is GREAT! and very well written except for the punctuation and grammar could be improved but overall I think it is a good start to the story and I demand that you write the next part!

I like the idea here, but for the love of god PROOFREAD your story or at the very least, run it through a spell checker.

... OH MY FREAKIN GOD! THAT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL!

I think im going ot cry... PLEASE WRITE MORE!

I hope you keep this going I like this alot.

This is a verry good story, u have me hooked and hooked good.. going to watch this very closey, so update soon please ( sorry know its just published today but am itching to see the next chapter )

P.S one thing you need to shape up on your grammer just a tiny bit.

Later,

-TT808-

Ahh A pretty good keitaro motoko story. Yeah there were some grammar mistakes but I knew what you meant. Just keep improving!

Cute story. -

But...

TO MANY GRAMMAR MISTAKES!

Please fix the story!

Wow...Things happening quickly... I hope to see a bit more to the length of the next chappie. It was an interesting start to your story. I want to see what happens next. Update soon please.