First off, they would not act like that. Second you have grammar and spelling mistakes throughout the story.

Some corrections you might want to consider:
urself-yourself
cirtainly- certainly
She unhooks the last shred OF (not or) dainty cloth covering her from him and slides the stapes off her shoulders, holding it on with her arm.

Never start a sentence with and. Unless it is something, someone is saying. Also surprising it with an 's' not a z.

There are more grammar error yu should fix. Also actually write a story with a plot. If you did have one for this stroy it certainly doesn't show that you did.

I am not a flamer. I am just trying to help.

this story is gay you really suck and screw you my story at least had a plot plus idiot my story wasn't intended to be one its supposed to just make people laugh off stress so i barely tried on my story idiot.

It wasen't wordy, it worked out quite well. The idea is a nice one, and Hinata with the ears is a nice detail, plus she's sexy... The only thing I can see wrong with it is that you went through the whole 'let out your wild side/animal insticts' thing in the beginning, yet when they got do to it, they were still pretty gental with one another, just seems unrealistic... Hope for the rest soon!

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OMG hinata and naruto would never do that. this sucks!

awsome cant wait for the second chapter

0.0 that was good. that was really good. that was like 'what the f*ck, i can't look away' good. please continue!

Pretty good, please continue.

i like it keep it up

I like to see more.

I loved it!! -blushes- uhm.. u can continue i-if u want! Plz update soon. Looking forward to reading the next chapter