that was pretty good but gruesum and funny at the same time how did you think of this

update asap

Great story so far, I like waht you'v done with it!

Nice idea you have here.

great story

GREAT CHAPTER! update soon!

GReat update

Two down, eight and a Tobi to go.

this is awesome!

and not only that, but you bring in Itachi and Kisame! i bet'cha Pein is not happy about this little ordeal...heheh, too bad for him!

i like what you've got going for the story, but there's just one problem i see in this story.

i can't read it correctly...

i'll give you the critique so you can add a few adjustments and then continue this awesome story!

1.) there are rarely any commas and because of that, most people will have trouble knowing where to take a break. i tried reading about Naruto's sword Minato (nice name by the way) and i lost myself at least 4 times. it would help if you added more commas to the story.

2.) go over the story, and REREAD IT! there were so many words and phrases where i felt like i was solving a jigsaw puzzle. while it is readable, the reader has to go back over what he read to understand what it truly meant. most readers want to be able to read and "go with the flow" of the story. but when they have to go back and reread it, they have to concentrate more than they should have to. so please check that over again.

That's It! keep it up!

Kenta Sonek Raikiri

good chapter, keep up the good work, byes

damn man thats messed up :D

Good fic btw order is nothing more than chaos that randomly fell in a pattern, so shouldn't that mean that with enough mastery over chaos naruto should be able to wield order(also why would chaos corrupt naruto, aren't all elements neutral good/evil wise?).

good job loved the scene with ero sannin it was hilarious while reading I was laughing so hard I almost choked

I've enjoyed reading your fanfic immensly. I was rather disappointed when i reached the last chapter posted. please post the next chapter soon. By the way. i love what you did to Jariaya. Your very good at describing scenes

good fic