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Reviews for: This Humble World of Ours
karierte
2007-12-20 . chapter 1
Uh...you sort of lost it after 'Sora stood'.

It became bits and bobs randomly placed together, ne?

I think you should try and implant more humour into the random bits and make them...more...uh? Plotful wasn't exactly the word I was looking for.

Since I'm a hypocrite.

Ackk.

What I was trying to say, was that I loved it anyway!
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