pretty good if not for the fact that's it's dead...

sweet I really like this fic (minus the whole evil Sakura & Tsunada thing) but i really hope you continue to write and finsh this :)

It's OK so far, I like this, except for a couple of things.

I think you've made the Kyuubi a bit too nice. It's pretty much the same Kyuubi in 9/10 stories here in FFn. It's a bit of a let down, but not too much. I cringe every time the Kyuubi says "Kit".

The next thing is the random Japanese words sprinkled throughout the story. It takes something away from the story. I mean this story is written in English. The dialogue is in English. The characters speak English, so why on earth is Itachi and Naruto using the words "kaa-san" and "tou-san"? The Japanese words doesn't fit in with the rest of the dialogue. One time I had to stop reading and actually look up what a word meant. I can understand why you would use Japanese for words like "Hokage", "Amaterasu" or for other techniques but when the characters are in conversation and then a random Japanese word turn up, it distracts readers and disrupts flow. It makes it a bit awkward. This came out a bit whiny, lol. Its not that big of an issue, though it's a bit of an annoyance. It just seems like authors do this to make their story a bit more 'authentic' or something when its really not needed. *shrugs*

Nonetheless, I look forward to your update. Good luck.

Awful.

Sasuke turns into a "good" guy in this fic, yet Tsunade and Sakura are closet tyrants who suddenly goes crazy at the most inexplicable moment. The executions and the sudden alliance with the other villages doesnt make sense. Neither does the apathy of most of the village.

Tsunade has been Hokage for years, why act this way all of a sudden? This unexplained behavior (major oversight on your part) does not make sense, it goes against the fundamental nature of the characters that we know in cannon. If your going to make changes of this kind, make sure to explain it so the readers can at least try to suspend their disbelief.

Your OC character was introduced too quickly. Just BAM, shes there and apparently an important part of Narutos life.

Anyway, too fast and too unbelievable. Rewrite.

Okay, this is a good story, if somewhat unbelievable due to the bashing. However, two things. One, please don't make Tsunade bad in the new timeline. Two, please update more than twice a year.

Heheh, YugitoxTenshi huh? Shichibi is gonna be pissed! Oh well, it ain't gonna happen anyway. Not unless you want to put them both with him... OH MY GOD THAT WOULD BE AWESOME! But then Naruto would have to get someone else too... Probably that green haired girl with the pink eyes from Waterfall...

(Shakes head free of fantasies) Anyway, great chapter, looking foward to more, and hope you update soon!

Awsome.

Nice story defenitly something unique to me anyways

awsome new chapter cool story. YAY LEMONS! :)

Great story. Thanks.

awesome fic man, loved the new chapter, keep up the great work, looking forward to the next chapter!

Good story. I hope to see more of it soon.

good chapter, keep up the good work, byes

Not bad, not bad at all.

Not bad Zaara you always have a way making people like your story. wow Tsunade as a bad guy you don't see many like that. At first I thought they leave konoha with naruto and help him rebuild the whirlpool country and then go after konoha but this still worked.