I'm speechless. Usually I don't even read angsty stories because they make me sad (and this one made me sad, too), but I know all your other stories are amazing, so I decided to read this one and I loved it. It's so well written and it's not of out character or anything. Good job.

I've adored all your stories, and this is no exception. For someone who's not used to writing angst, you did very well. I cried - you really captured Bella's emotions, which was heartbreaking. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece - I love it!

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OMG towards the end I started to cry

that was so emotional and wow.

you are an wonderful writer..

you explained what she was feeling so well..

Wow...That's just about all I can say. This piece is one of the best I've ever read, fanfiction or published work. This should have been part of the books, really.

I think you could go far with this one.

xoxo,

Mikalah

that was amazing i absolutely loved it! you write very well!

very sad...but beautifully written.

Wow. This was...amazing. Intense. I loved it. It actually brought tears to my eyes.

this made tears come to my eyes...

good job!

you carried out the use of echoes in the story all the way through it perfectly..more please?

i loved it!

the ending was very strong and powerful

you may say you can only write fluff, but its one of the best things i've read in a while

thanks!

That was so heartbreaking, but so agonizingly beautiful at the same time. You certainly, absolutely, have a way with words. The writing was wonderful, and the plot/idea was fantastic. I loved it more than I could say. You are truly a... breathtakingly good writer. You will go places. :)

wah.

great story. so emotional, so wrenching...

ahh. im so depressed! poor, poor bella!

once again, great story! beautiful.

Oh. My. Goodness. You don't need to write JUST fluff. You can write anything! That was one of the most convincing, most emotional pieces I've read. I feel like I understand Bella (during that time) better, now. Thank you.

Oh my god! it nearly made me cry! Very, very good.

Very well done. Bravo.

Wow!

That was incredibly powerful and heartbreaking! I think you completely captured Bella's pain during her pre-"waking up" days.

Excellent character study.