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| Christian Ninja Rabbit 2008-03-29 ch 1,  | abuseWow! You are right. This is a lot like my story. But I actually like yours a whole lot better. You've completely nailed the characters and their reactions. Especially Cornelius. And I love how the words seem to flow so easily. Great job! |
| ButterscotchWM 2008-02-02 ch 1, | abuseOh YEAH! You know, I just remembered, now. The blue time machine was still in 2007! The Bowler Hat Guy used it to go back to the past to sign the contract. Then Lewis took him into the future using the red time machine. So THE BOWLER HAT GUY LEFT THE BLUE TIME MACHINE IN THE PAST! *looks around nervously*... SOMEBODY, FIND THAT TIME MACHINE! hehe! :-D |
| AudacesFortunaJuvat 2008-01-26 ch 1, | abuseAw... ((Just one thing though: make sure you fix a couple inconsistencies with tense. That's all.)) *sniffs* It's so...so...AW... ~Fortie |
| Nausicaa of the Spirits 2007-12-21 ch 1, | abuseStill, Wilbur, it wasn't nice that you lied to Lewis about taking him to his mum! You should be ashamed of yourself! You're no friend of Lewis's! YOU'RE A LYING, LIE-FACED PERSON WHO GOES BACK ON HIS PROMISES! You sicken me, deceitful one! *walks off, but comes back to take a cookie that Wilbur was about to grab* I got your cookie. |
| Zaehlas 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuseWow. Well thought out. I can't find any faults with it, and I really like it. Very touching... |
| doodlegirll 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. I like your writing style, and this flowed nicely. ~Robi |
| Ember411 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuseAwsome! First review! This was good. |