So beautiful!
I really hated Beth when she stood upork, this story was the perfect solution for that!
Wonder who that vampire protecting freshies was...it's was an interesting turn.
Very good story!

I'm so glad I found this again. I remember reading it before, but I was one of thosee lurkers who hadn't bothered to register . . . This story was amazingly good, and I've noticed you have one other story that I can't wait to read. I really hope to see more of your work in the future, even though, alas, Moonlight-the-show is no more.

But um, Mick going shirtless? He's so worried about his control all of the time, but what about poor Beth's self restraint? A girl can only be so strong. Have some mercy, man.

Yes. Everything does taste better with chocolate. Oh! The possibilities there seem almost . . . ahem . .. endless, don't they?

This was an absolutely perfect exchange between them:


“I guess you haven’t noticed in your 85 years of living there, but L.A. isn’t exactly ice skating country. So no, I have never ice skated before,” she told him, still pushing herself along using the rail, slowly getting used to the feel of the skates.

An amused grin spread across his face as he watched her. That was his Beth, always ready to try something new.

He skated past her, looking way too graceful for her liking. “Why are you so good?” Beth called after him, slightly annoyed that he looked as if he’d been born for this. Mick circled around the rink before stopping a mere inch behind her and whispering in her ear. “Vampire curse number 8: the ability to ice skate like a gold medalist.” He said it with such seriousness that Beth burst out laughing. She turned to face him, taking extra care not to fall; though she was certain Mick would catch her if she even started to wobble. He was grinning down at her like a kid in a candy store. Beth found the look irresistible so she grabbed onto his jacket for support and leaned up to kiss his cheek. “Well then vamp boy, if you’re so inherently good, you can give me lessons.”

I like that we get to see just the tiniest hitch of jealousy from Beth, and we get to see how proud Mick is of her too. Also live the natural humor between them. Lovely.

If only this had been the way of it! I loved the way you expressed their thoughts and interpreted their actions. That's the thing that's better about reading something than seeing it performed, you can't always tell what the motivation is. You've filled in the blanks for us beautifully. On to the next!

aww sweet endin, i loved tis series while it lastd. i prefered ur endin but we got da same result at da end of the series wit dem finaly gettin 2gether:) Keep up the good work! xx

FABULOUS, FANTASTIC!

I mean, there were a few things I wouldn't have done, as it had flown a TEENY bit too smoothly and there were black holes; it couldn't have gone into the show because of those things.

Plus, there would be no show once they're officially together!

But it was a joy to read, kudos.

Ack!! WHO is the other vamp?? A half-vamp hunter guy?? Oh, one small little detail, Mick would have smelled him. The guy could feasibly get the upper hand on him, but Mick should have noted something, especially a vamp that old since we know that older vamps give out a stronger odor, one of decay.

Very nice. WHY finished?? You could have continued on an made a big mystery about who this other guys was and where he came from, why he was hunting his own kind.

Anyway, very nice and there were some really sweet parts too. :)

OOh ... someplace warm ... lol! Well, now that makes sense. :)

This chapter was really good.

I think the first line is worded a little strange. How about "Beth gazed out of the window in awe, her eyes reflecting the city lights ? " "He had seen the look of hesitation on her face, knew she had almost said no." - You used on her face with just one sentence between them which is a little redundant. Maybe - "He had seen her look of hesitancy, knowing she almost said no. "

Mick circled around the rink before stopping a mere inch behind her and whispering in her ear. “Vampire curse number 8: the ability to ice skate like a gold medalist.” O ... very nice line!

I'd say watch the repetitiveness, like saying their names too often, stuff like that.

The first paragraph had small errors in it, but the rest was excellent. the whole thing was ecxellent really :)

I'm wondering if they would have gone so far so soon ?

Chapter one, off to a wonderful start! Kate, this chapter is VERY well written! :)

Simply brilliant. :) Favs.
Ciao,
Jenne

Wonderful story, very in character!
Both falling asleep together was the perfect ending, aw
Thanks for sharing.

mick and beth fluff i love it...please continue

Loved this! Your writing style is so good! I hope you'll decide to take this story further! I'd love to read more! :)