Characterization and the depth of the psychology really made me envious. Also, the writing was very visceral. Made me feel I was there. Whenever Madeline spoke about Candace. Anything during flashback. Whenever Liv was reminiscing. When Madeline broke down after Elliot's false tirade. The whole thing was quite brilliant. Unpredictable, mysterious, intriguing, and heart-rending. Overall beautiful story. Madeline's my fave!

Yay! More points of view! I like that... proves your expertise, though your previous chapters have done more than enough on that end. Keep up thy greatness, for Padawan thou no longer art!

Aha! At last, we here from the sicko! What more will the story's unfolding unravel? Hmm...

Great way to give us more of Olivia, but, as always, never attracts from the story. Not many more compliments will surface from me soon!

Deeper grows the plot... Me likey! I also like how the psychologist, though she uses those obnoxious terms for which I despise them, has a back story that we see merely a glimpse of here. It makes her more personal without detracting from the story itself. Beautiful!

Nice way to ease the burning desire you left us with in the last chapter without totally eliminating it!

Whoa! Bad-A (not sure if we can curse on this sight or not; never know)! At any rate, I really hope we get to see behind the eyes of this crook, because as much as I hate him, he must have some reason to be such a jack-a!

My goodness, it only gets better! Favorite part of it all: the powerful emotion that Madeline evokes even through her writing! This is phenomenally written I think, simply because we've seen her emotion from the girl herself, so that when we see her scribbles, we can feel it from within her even though we are still in Olivia's point of view.

You should soon consider becoming a novelist. You'd be one of the world's greatest, I tell you!

This (and I know I sound like a lit crit, but who cares?) is a moment of sheer emotion like I've not read in the best books! Indeed, I feel like an American J.K. Rowling has birthed at last, for you really capture the emotions of Madeline with perfect depth, as though you've been where she now lies.

Another intriguing thing about your style is that you make the casual switch from Olivia's point of view to Madeline's. Unlike most authors, you can pull this off because of how seamless your style is anyhow. Keep up the good work, girl! It's awesome!!

BTW: what happened to Madeline, why, and what scoundrel is responsible? Is he still alive? Will he die (please say yes!)? Or, better still, does he have reasons for his degrading character flaws? Hm...

The simplicity of your style reminds me oddly of J.K. Rowling. Superb but easy to understand; unlike many authors of today's repute (Stephen King, are you in the house?). I really like it so far. Can't wait to see how the characters play out their individual roles.

Superb opening! The second person-amazing, mostly because I couldn't do it so well myself. Also, the metaphors, similes, etc. are simple, which is good. Too many people try to overdo those, but yours fit the character Olivia precisely.

I've seen the show and bizarrely, it feels as though I'm in Olivia's head. Very good with capture of her character! Excited to read more!

That's one of the better fanfictions I've read in a while. Great job!

It cut me off! So my favorite lines: (heh heh)
“Madeline believes in me. She needs me.” And I don’t? he thinks. Then wonders, who doesn’t? (perfect. Olivia desperately wanting to be needed, and not able to see how much she IS needed. But Elliot knows of course!)

In the end, Alex had made her point and said all she’d wanted to. There was nothing more to say after that. And yet Olivia has been searching all these years for that one chance to be able to tell someone – Alex maybe, or her mother, or Elliot even, just somebody – that this time she had actually won. This time she’d made the world right. But it’s never happened. Not now, for Zoe and Candace and Madeline. Not even for herself. (This made me cry. So TTC and heartbreaking. Makes me want to hug Liv!)

And like totally the whole Epilogue of course! I can't wait to read more from you. Now hurry up and update Undercover again! :-D
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wow. I just cannot believe... wow. It's actually over? I'm crying, seriously. This whole story was just beautifully crafted and excellently excecuted. The show's characters are very TTC and the ones you have created are inspiring as well. The whole thing rings true. You tied up all the lose ends and still left room for the reader to complete the story themselves. This is fantastically done. Just the right splash of mystery, angst, suspense, courtroom/police procedural, and of course a hint of E/O loveliness! how could you go wrong? This is a favorite of mine, always and forever. The Epilogue makes me smile ssoo much. I couldn't have imagined a better moment to end this whole thing. And you were so right, the inner thoughts for the character's were perfect (Alex! aw) but it really did have to end with Madeline. I stand amazed.
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WOW! I just read the whole story, and that was just amazing! Very well written!