UPDATE! :3

great story. keep writing. So kawaii. Does that even happen in the manga?

That was great!

good chapter if a bit short...

Pretty good story so far... A few grammar mistakes, and you got some of the names wrong.

It's Karin not Karen...

It's Tobi not Tobe, and I'm really interested in what he looks like.

Uchiha Madara... Interesting.

Please write some more, I wanna see how the story will progress, and it's not gonna be some Arc Recreation, since you started in a cut-off point.

Can't wait!

wow this is pretty good, oh btw, its Tobi, not Tobe

Poor Naruto-chan...

I was wondering what happend to this fic. but i know how it is with school anyway this chapter was good. i was wondering our you gonna have naruto train with the toads?

Well, you picked up at the end of the manga, and if the manga turns off from where you are heading, it might get a little sticky, but I am curious as to what you have planned. Hope the next chapter comes soon.

Chan is a term of affection for females, use -kun for males.

Other than that it's great.

A very good start! I look forward to seeing how it proceeds.

I like the way the story is starting. I guess the only thing that i saw was the grammer errors but that is a second thing compared to a good story, also it would be cool if the chaps. were a reasonable lenth not too long but deff not two short cuz then you wont get into the story as much. I am looking forward to reading this story so i hope you try your best to make it as interesting as possible. I am also happy that you gave definitions for the Japanese words because not all the readers understand what some of the words mean.

umm... waiting for whatever happens tomorrow right?

Well this looks very interesting but depending on what happens in the manga you may have to change it (i am not talking about what Jiraiya says just wether he leaves with the Toad or not (for got his name :P) and ya Jiraiya could still die from his wounds or what not just putting that out there) but either way this seems very interesting so keep it up.

for me, there was nothing to hate about. i loved the first chapter!