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LadyMo
2009-11-30 . chapter 1
This was a sweet story. I'm still wondering who lit that lamp but it will remain a mystery which makes the story better. I like thinking it was the Christmas Spirit, a miracle as the title says. Thanks for a lovely Christmas story.
:-)
remerkaba
2009-01-16 . chapter 1
This was a fun story. I really enjoyed it!
SamJackShipLover
2008-06-22 . chapter 1
*sigh*

This was so cute. It makes me all happy ... and it's not even the season :) Good job!!
Janna lee Cushing
2008-04-09 . chapter 1
Okay, first of all i just wanted to say that this story is truly amazing!! i was so happy and so indulged reading it i almost cried! Secondly, the hole storyline was absolutely amazing all the way down to the very end! Thirdly what an amzing job well done!! Thanx for giving me and i guess everyone that loved this story as much as I did some amazing stuff to read and enjoy. Thank you once again..

Sincerely..
~
Janna Lee
age 14
Kimberly
2007-12-25 . chapter 1
Excellent, just the right amount of sappy mush.
BettyHall223
2007-12-22 . chapter 1
Great Christmas entertainment. Thanks for writing it.
dp
2007-12-21 . chapter 1
Wonderful Christmas story.
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2007-12-21 . chapter 1
that was a cute christmas story.
HDorothy
2007-12-21 . chapter 1
This was a great Christmas story!! Well done! Love it! You have a natural gift of story telling. Keep at it!

Some writing advice: I don't know why, but you repeatedly end stand alone dialogue with a comma instead of a period. See example below. These should always end with a period. It is after all the end of the sentence.

You wrote: "You r-rest. I'll w-wake you in half an hour and we'll s-switch,"

It should read: "You r-est. I'll w-wake you up in half an hour and we'll s-switch."

You do the same with all dialogue and dialogue action tags, you insert a comma, instead of a period. This is not always the case. It depends if the 'tag' that follows the dialogue is part of the dialogue or stands alone as an action. I suggest getting a book on fiction and novel writing. It will strengthen your writing. Also highly suggest, The Chicago Manual of Style, 15th edition. This is like the writer's bible and has helped me immensely.

I lok forward to reading more of your stories. :)
LuSo
2007-12-21 . chapter 1
very nice, certainly brightened up my holiday :)
iwrite4fun
2007-12-21 . chapter 1
This is really good! Just a nice, feel good Christmas story.
sg1star
2007-12-21 . chapter 1
some times the best stories that look this simplest but have just the right touch that makes the heart flutter and the eyes mist over thanks for such a story.
froggy0319
2007-12-21 . chapter 1
Really glad they are both OK and of course together :)
VisualIDentificationZeta
2007-12-21 . chapter 1
wow, a fantastic fic, really loved it, great job!
kinnik72
2007-12-21 . chapter 1
This is fantastic. It sure made a great gift.
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