Er...Fortescues? As in the one who sells ice cream? Or am I wrong?

Shinohara heavy Industries? For some reason that sounds familiar? Is it Patlabor?

This got confusing. As if parts of the story and plot are missing. Like why is Harry in the ministry at all? Or at Wizengamot? What did he do with Albus in the Gringotts?

And why is he suddenly and repeatedly calleda sociopath? (not that he isn't but why start now call him that)

And was there a time jump somewhere? Harry is suddenly so much more adult, raping girls decades older than him and all..

I didn't recognise any of the crossovers. I hope you don't take this too anime so that purely Potter fans can read this as well.

Hello,

I read through the first seven chapters and I still have no clue about what';s going on.

That could be the result of a cleverly crafted mystery that is to be resolved in the end, but it's rather obvious that is not the case.

No, usually it's the sign of either a poorly written fanfic, or a cross-over with something I don't recognize.

So, to this is a cross-over with... what exactly?

-mo

If you wanted you could use elements of the Dresden Files as a spirit of knowledge, named Bob, is also used there.

Also, I'm not sure but I think when you said this: "By the way, He, Harry, is also kind of uh, what is that word, not necessarily insane, but uh, not evil, well kind of evil, but not the word I am looking for, more I don’t know off hand."

The words you were looking for probably are sociopathic(for kind of insane) and amoral(for kind of evil).

Another thing I should mention, you might find it easier if you just don't use the accents for anyone, except as a as way to 'flesh out' some of the more difficult characters.

Definately impressive, some ironing out errors, spelling and grammar checks would make it even more enjoyable to read. Impressive tale, I especially like the Warhammer references; I have given some thought to writing a similar fic with Harry calling upon the forces of both WH40K and WHFB...

Great fic otherwise, I'd say 7.0-7.5 out of 10.0

this is so funny if you consider who is working with who. you rock.

for some reason i can't stop reading this... even though its a bit hard to follow at first considering i haven't read/seen anything else to really follow most of the references at first but i've grown into this story immensely...

even though, as some people have mentioned, its not likely to ever happen, that's the beauty of fanfiction... you can make whatever you want.. the interested will continue to read and the uninterested will move on to one of the other 1,0,0 stories on the website.

you don't seem to care too much for your flamers though so that's good... i've never really read a perfect story in my life.. even the creator of our much loved Harry Potter series comes under a lot of fire for things 'people thought should be different'.

SO...kudos to you... i'm lovin it... keep writing.

pretty much utter rubbish.

you've gotta be somewhat decently versed in the fantasy genre to understand this story since you explained about 1 percent of what the hell you were talking about.

then of course there's the story itself. half of it doesn't make any sense, the rest isn't based on much logic at all, is it? i mean a ten or eleven year old going around ordering primarchs to kill, crime organization, and all that...utter rubbish. you don't even see child soldiers acting like that and they're really the closest i could compare harry with.

grammar wise, i suggest you take a refresher course.

Story absolutely fails on grounds of punctuation, grammar, and lack of ability to write humans. Because you're not. You're writing a story about a colony of aliens who have observed humans, perhaps by intercepting television signals, and are trying and failing to imitate them. That's how bad your attempts at humanity are.

Although your premise shows originality and is carried out fairly well, the poor grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. are a decided turn off. I wish you success in your pursuits.

OMG I STAND CORRECTED! O_O

”Better, at least some one has manners.” Commented the sorcerer cutting off the stern Witch, yanking a chair out from under the table. “So what do you bunch degenerate isolated contemptuous bunch of Neanderthals want with one such as I?”

BEST RANT BY AN 11 YEAR OLD! I am definitely posting this on Facebook!

“Not now Uncle I am about to execute some one.” Ground out Harry.

The walrus blinked. “Right carry on then.” Hastily retreating inside.

officially THE BEST HP quote that I have EVER encountered in my friggen LIFE! XD

If I knew every background story that you are putting into this, I'd probably love it (disregarding grammar, spelling and punctuation). As it is, I have no idea what's going on and how Harry got to be the way he is.

I certainly admire your creativity, though.

All due respect,

Barefoot Bohemian

...