wow, that was so good! very well written! SoAL is my fav game, and you really got their characters well. the ending was a surprise; you had me guessing until the very end!! very, VERY well done!

That was a great story but I have one question... who's wedding day? Vyse and Fina's or Vyse and Aika's I'm confused... lol anyway, great fanfic.!

Well, at last I've managed to get up a final review of this one.

The humorous banter isn't as strong in chapters 2 and 3, and about half the scenes didn't seem needed, but the overall picture is very nice. The mystery pulls together in a natural fashion, and I love how all the bizarre clues fit. It's a pretty simple plot idea, actually, but through the clues you planted it became something a bit more.

And the humor is excellent, of course. I found Aika's enthusiasm for Fina braiding her hair and Vyse's consequent forced declaration to be especially hilarious. Classic situational humor. "then we'll look like twins" - love it.

Aside from a lot of scenes not really being needed, this has been a fine little taste of humor and light mystery, and a good testament to Vyse, Aika, and Fina's friendship. needs more stories of this variety, methinks.

Sorry that I'm so late reviewing this. I actually read this chapter the day it was published, but only now have had time to do a review. The Christmas season and work on the final chapter of "The Proposal" have kept me very busy indeed.

Make no mistake, though, this one has me very excited. The mystery here is an intriguing one, with bizarre enough clues to have the reader wondering, but little enough given that there's no way of guessing the answer.

You've always been a master of the playful banter between Vyse, Aika, and Fina, but this somehow manages to be your best work yet in that area. Every bit had me chuckling along, especially the section about "figure-speech" and running jokes. And though I can't understand the line "I should splash out on myself more often, I conclude.”", the hilarious dialogue surrounding it makes me wish I could.

Only two tiny problems:
1."Except for Fina’s furniture and so," should be "Except for Fina's furniture and such,".
2.The paragraph from "What the heck" through "too weird to be true." isn't necessary, and the fact that it's there makes it sound like Vyse is attracted to Fina. Mind you, it's clear from the rest of your writing that that isn't so, but if I hadn't read your earlier stuff and simply stumbled on that paragraph, I'd think you were setting up Vyse/Fina.

And yes, as always the characters are vibrant and real in your fiction. This looks like a really great work. I'll be reading the remaining chapters soon.

A nice story, but I'm kind of disappointed that it's over already.

Loved the ending, no doubt. ^-^ Congrats on the story, it was wonderful. A great read.

Heh. Liked how this one turned out. It was witty as hell!

You know, I think Esteban could use a second story. Perhaps you can write a follow-up to Raiders of the Lost Heart?

You know the rest. Please keep writing stories!

Nice story so far. Update soon!

I LOL'd.

It's great to know that you're still writing things!

This was hilarious. Please keep going!

Great story so far, your personifications of the characters was pretty spot-on, even if your grammar and sentence structure made me wince at times. Can't wait to see Fina's surprise. ^-^