teh blumchenkinder 2008-01-19 . chapter 1At first, this was a bit confusing... but I can see why you did it that way. Maybe a few more initial cues? Eh, you've probably futzed with it already.
Spelling roundup:
pushed out two barley words] ?... bare, perhaps, but not barley.
Daley Planets] Daily
Alexandra Luthor] ... Alexander, right?
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Nicely played. I look forward to your next piece. |