hey dont u hav eny strories on lili

yes yes yes uncut plz

man your stories are really funny and btw nancy is a guy

Nice story you did make a couple od mistakes here and there but apart from that you did good. Please can you make Hwoarang beat Jin up thanks!

Since I finally finished reading this story I wanted to review it. I'll start with the good things and then go to the bad things.

Pros: I really enjoyed the plot and the suspense. Lots of things that kept me guessing as to what was going to happen and many ups and downs throughout the story. Hwoarang had a very funny and entertaining attitude and he seemed to make the story flow very well. There were some very funny parts that involved him too and I think you made his character consistent throughout the story as well as the others. Although some may disagree, I think you did an excellent job being descriptive but not being overly descriptive and ruining the story. You told me just enough so I could get a clear picture in my head but not too much to where it made your story seem overly complex or took away from it.

Cons: Grammar needs a lot of improvement. There is at least one grammatical mistake in every chapter I believe. If you need a nice word processor(cough torrent cough) PM me and I'll help you out. They do a good job at catching simple grammatical mistakes but sometimes mess up and catch things that aren't grammatically incorrect. The ending was also very awkward and abrupt. It felt very unresolved... perhaps an epilogue would solve this?

Overall: I really enjoyed this story and I thought you did a good job on it!

Whoa...87 reviews? Well, here's your 88th! XD Great story! I loved it- the whole way through (even though I was too lazy to review all the chapters :P). The ending wasn't too bad. My endings are choppy- you did well. ^_^

FilipinaChick29

WTF that **, leaving without even seeing Jules one last time. But that is so him though. God..."When you have a problem and you don't want us to help you, and decide to leave...we feel betrayed!" Amen to that. Yes...oh yes...if you know what I mean.

YAY Hwoarang stays! Muahahaha, effin' **. Julia loves and cares for him, and he still wants to leave. Lol, Hwoa is definitely gonna bomb that test. There's no way he can cram for that. Haha Souljah Boy.

Omg, Julia switched the test. Wow. Hwoarang is such a moron.
Anyways, good job on this. I really enjoyed it. I'm guessing you won't write much like this for the Tekken section anymore, but that's ok. Glad I finished reading this. Talk to you later.

Aww, Jin and Xiao interaction, even though I hate her guts, mehehe. This was some good dialogue, and I see you've been gradually improving in this area. Lol Steve. Hells yeah there are some nice lookin' Brazilian boys, mhm.
Oh wow, so Hwoarang does end up rejecting his mom after all. Well...he never really knew her anyway, and she abandoned him after all. So how does she suddenly expect him to jump up and live with her after so many years? I hoped you would expand on this part more, get into his head more about his mom, but I guess that's ok.

Hwoa and his mom. Reminds me of you-know-who.
Anyway, I like how you describe their actions in here. It's easy to picture, like the details about the tea, and the dialogue too. And wow, Hwoarang exploding on his mom like that. It's understandable. In my opinion, a real mom would never have left her child. Mothers just don't do that, they just don't. Why didn't she come back for him later, after she'd gotten enough money together? Why'd she have to wait more than a decade to come back? That's ** up.

Anyway, this was good. Simple, but to the point, and yes to the hwoa/julia interaction. :)

Yo I'm finally continuing with this story of yours. Don't worry, I haven't forgotten about it. But it seems that you are already finished with it...ah well. That's what I get for not reviewing in ages, huh? Lol. Anyway. ...I can relate to Julia's situation, as you know, of course. Wanting to help Hwoarang, Hwoarang all of a sudden doing a personality flip flop, not knowing if he's gonna hurt himself or do something stupid, but loving him nonetheless...psh. I know.

"People change and that's part of life." Unfortunately, you're right. Sometimes it's good, other times, not so good. On to 13.

That's a damn shame lol.
Good job Dynasty

LAST?! DAMMIT.

'Steve was teaching Christie how to box and she was doing pretty well as he showed how to successful land a uppercut to the jaw, while Jin was watching Xiaoyu play his PSP and telling her how to play the game.' - Aw X]

'...and I'm not going to let that happened,” - 'Happen'. He hasn't left yet.

“WHY THE HELL YOU TACKLED ME FOR YOU IDIOT!” Hwoarang glared at him. - WIN! And, 'tackle'.

“Listen here you little bastard! You're just going to run away from your problems because you believe you can't do it. I don't think so! Every since you got here, you've been helping us out with our problems without even asking us, you just did it. When you helped me with my problem, I've changed since then. I'm opening up more and becoming more social with everyone. If I didn't want your help, I would of beaten your ** back then, but no I listen to you. However, when you have a problem and you don't want us to help you and decide to leave...We feel betrayed!” - ...Heart... Massive heart.

so you don't get know refunds,” - Don't get 'no' refunds. Or alternatively 'don't get a refund'.

“THIS BOOK IS GIGANTIC! I CAN'T STUDY ALL THIS IS IN ONE DAY!” - WIN WIN WIN.

“And drink this red bull energy. It gives you wings!” Steve began flapping his arms as if he had wings. - XDXDXDXDXD MOAR WINLINESS.

“Nice punch Christie, you can defiantly become a boxer.” - Lol, and its spelt 'definitely'.

'WHAT IN THE HELL?! NO ** WAY!' - What?? WHAT?? D:

KINDERGARTEN TEST. OMGLOL. LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL.

Great way to end the story mate, it made me grin XD I'll miss this fic so much, its my favourite one of yours. Great job. :)

HEY MAN WHERE THE HELL IS LAW AND HIS SON SON?! THERE IS NO TEKKEN WITHOUT THEM! AND WHERE IS LEI?
JEEZ man you have to put these characters in for the story to get better. its good, but think about the other charcters

The Steve/Christie scene was lotsa lolz ;). Comedy is really your thing, Dynasty! Keep the laughs comin', we need 'em!

“That's because I'm real and them other ** are fake,” Christie sternly said and then winked at Steve causing him to laugh.

“HA..HAHA!”

Christie expression then got serious. “Steve don't do that laugh.”

Wow, I dont know what made me laugh at this park but I'm glad Christie let him know she the real deal. The whole Jin/Xiao thing was cute. It reminded me of an anime. Not anyone in particular just an anime. I hope Hwoarang takes this damn test and gets on with his life. AND YES THEM BOYS IN BRAZIL IS SEXY! lol.

Can't wait for the last chapter. Glad I gave the you the idea for the story.