kim = scary
shego = funny as heck xD

this is so sick and wrong... i thought at the end shego will be together with kim... is there any possibility to have a sequel of this? thanks for the story...

For some wierd reson I found that funny am a sick person. =)
But i don't think I can handle watching something like this but reading it the way you wrote was great

Wow. Amazing story, Beeftony. You were really able to get into Shego's mind and feelings! You write extremely well.

twisted. it made me smile reading your fanfic.

I liked it especially the end it seems like the pain literally sent Shego to a place in her mind where she could endure I love how Kim snapped the ending rocked I wonder if they'll take over hell.


One critic I only see one place where blood is mentioned I wonder what happened to the blood when Shego was stabbed in the thigh, or when she first sliced her open. During an operation the blood seeps up as the skin splits it's not spurts its like a leak. I loved it though my only suggestion.

Okay, you got me with "Freedom." When I read that, I rolled my eyes so hard they hurt. When I kept reading, and I saw what was really going on, I laughed. That's my Shego... :D

I liked going back to the beach. Nice touch, though the philososphy maybe was a little thick. It interrupted the sound of the waves... But maybe that's just me.

I think Shego's sarcasm really comes through this time around, and although first-person-in-present-tense still makes me cringe, it actually comes off pretty well now.

Wow, just wow

I read and seen worse so it didnt' bother me. In fact it was a delightfulread. Wonder what that says about myself. ANyway about half way through I started thinking and suddenly laughing. What if Shego just couldn't cry. I mean what if her body didn't produce tears leaving Kim to torment herself and belittle herself for the rest of her sentance in prison or a mental institution. Causing her to go even more insane since she is Kim Possible and can do anything. Yet even the impossible could defeat her as she rottened a way thinking she was a failure at something she set out to do. Sorry about that ramble. It just came to me. any way not exactly a horror fic to me, but good writing none the less. later

Hmm... I don't really know what to say. I mean, it's good, but the most disturbing thing in it was when Kim said she was gonna listen to the recording of Shego screaming to go to sleep that night, for some reason. It's probably because she doesn't seem ALL THAT insane to me until then. I realize that was your intention, but it just doesn't seem very scary to me, you know? Then again, I probably would have had Kim nail Shego's hands and feet to the wall with adamantium nails, then pin her open like a frog in a science class, then had Kim punch Shego repeatedly in the exposed gut with brass knuckles. So, y'know, maybe I've built up a tolerance to this sort of thing. ;)

It's well-written, though, and I can't think of any actual objective problems. I think the problem I have with the story (it isn't very scary) probably comes down to personal preference. I also very rarely find written horror fiction scary, so maybe that has something to do with it. Still, I couldn't help noticing a certain detached tone that failed to move me viscerally. I think the problem might be that you didn't write it from Kim's perspective; it seems like the detached tone would fit better with Kim's perspective. I dunno.

Anyway, you did a very good job. Kudos.

beeftony,

This has got to be one of the darkest, sickest, most wicked pieces I have ever read on this site. With this being my 336th review, that says something.

That said, it was also quite brilliant. Perhaps that would explain why Ron, such a good-hearted soul, would become such an evil genius as Zorpox when he was exposed to a similar device.

I'm still trying to figure out how Shego could have possibly (no pun intended) survived having her intestines force-fed to her. I guess I am reminded of a line from 'Aladdin', of all places...

'...It's amazing what you can live through!'

Your friend in writing,

The Samurai Crunchbird

Eeg. All I can say for some reason is good-bye Kimmie, hello Kara!

Where would Ron be in a sitch like this? Especially a post Graduation, or at least a post Exchange Ron that has knowledge of his MMP and is able to restrain Kim? Would Will Du really be the first one through that door?
Otherwise while disturbing this was really well done and great to read.